Clock counting
half breathing,
listening for the
ghost of your voice,
I wait
lost,
for the phone
to sing.
Author notes
all this waiting sucks
Comments
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Great piece! I like the simple terminology used and the story within which is conveyed in a great way of structure and the fact this is straight to the point in a creative way through its briefness is the peak of victory.
~Emily~ xx
P.s. I feel a little off today which is why my comments may not make sense, forgive me.
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Wow how enigmatic!
This sings off the page right deep into the captured imagination of the reader, wow what amazing work, love this it is so rich in exciting ambience and enchantment, a bit like the film "Brief Encounter" same impact, amazing stuff, love your style, very well done.
Poetic Hugs and Congrats,
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
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The way you write this is so familiar. How many times have I waited for a call, wanting to hear from someone very important or special, and wondering if I had missed the call or whether it would ever come. Anxiety at being unable to more because I was unsure. This is a truly fine piece.
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i really like the phone singing it is so totaly me, i like how you have incorparated my waiting into this wonderful poem thank you for the entry in my contest good luck and as always keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy
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