with a pen as your loom
you wove magic with words
colored oceans filled,
with flotsam and jetsam
each stroke of hand
mending a soul
torn with deceit
your finished piece
now hangs on my heart
a tapestry of love
In a list
A contest entry
- Weaving by CarolDesjarlais.
600 points, ended May 25, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Tapestry ( PIF) by Freed by Mercy.
900 points, ended August 16, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Weaver by james119.
600 points, ended September 16, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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So brief, gentle, and beautiful. I like your use of the metaphor. May I suggest, though, "torn" rather than "broken". It seems to fit the metaphor of cloth better.
Do you need the comma after soul?
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the pure simplicity of wisdom earned by reading of poetry here......really a nice write.... with no flowery reasons to persuade...it is a knowing...a good knowing...
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I do want to thank you for your kind words. My silverware is greatly appreciated. Juls
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Woven, tied...however its done this is lovely
Love, C (I know I am bad 
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they keep jumping out at me Thanks for reading
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