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Behind Every Lone Eye Is An Even Lonelier Heart

 

the eye
 

 

 

There's so much to her
She could never look away
From the tears and past mistakes
Underneath the Maybeline
She is crying, for freedom
While the world revolves around her iris
She sits down and wipes the tears from her eyes

What you can't see from this view
may indeed puzzle you
What if you could see pain, through the lens of another's eye
How could we change their lives
if we knew they burdened so

To me, what it seems
Behind every lone eye is an even lonelier heart

 

 

Author notes

Pic credit: Eyes_by_NightDV @ deviantart.com

Option - 1. EYES. Any interpretation. Are they windows into the soul? Are they always watching, spying, judging? Any particular eyes you want to talk about?

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  • Theory Of The Lost
    July 30, 2008

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    before i judge could you please tell me what part of my family you want to be thank you


  • movedon
    July 25, 2008

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    The title itself could be your coined quote. It's so true! Great take on the promt. I really loved this piece.

    Warmest,
    Mylee


  • Pandorea
    June 15, 2008
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    ooo...sad but really pretty. this is a really beautiful write.


  • stoli
    June 13, 2008

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    This is really great. I love the idea you went with (and that was a stunning choice of picture) and the simple, understated way you reached your conclusion was very effective.

    There's so much to her
    She could never look away
    From the tears and past mistakes
    Underneath the Maybeline
    She is crying, for freedom
    Great opening lines -- they interested me straight away.

    Thanks for entering this.


  • Madhumita
    May 30, 2008

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    WOW!!! SIMPLY AMAZING..U'VE CAPTURED THE IMAGE BRILLIANTLY!!!! DEEP MEANING. GREAT WORDS!!!! NICE IMAGERY...KEEP UP!!!!


  • abuyi
    May 29, 2008

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    very heartfelt write.. truly beautiful
    loved the emotions sketched in last para
    thanks for commenting on my work


  • Abby In Chains. silver member
    May 26, 2008
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    great last lines. i can empathize, certainly.

    Abby.


  • Cannonsfire
    May 25, 2008

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    If we look hard enough we can see it, know the pain it has seen and if we are wise we can help change it, to the look of one who knows love. It really doesn't take much, just an outstretched hand willing to take another's and give them hope Love, C

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