dark sky
flags furiously blow
cat cowers under deck
A contest entry
- Weekend Haiku by azure85.
600 points, ended May 28, 2008, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is an awesome poem. I have seen many pop up thunderstorms like this. 2 of my cats cower under my Mom and Dad's bed. LOL Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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The haiku is such a challenging form; here the depth of reality, captured in so few words, is outstanding as well as astounding.
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Well written Haiku...
It amazes me that in so few words such imagery shines through.
Thank you for sharing
Becky
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dark sky
flags furiously blow
cat cowers under deck great poem in just a few words this says so much good luck in the contest thank you for sharing your poem with the group
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Impressive!!!
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Wonderfully done. The picture is so complete.
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this is so visual, I can see everything ... I think I even hear the wind blowing.
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dark sky
flags furiously blow
cat cowers under deck
Oh, that is a good AHA moment, that kitty hiding below where it is safe! Thank you so much!
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This is wonderful I'm just recently getting the 'hang' of the haiku and I loved this one.
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like fire in the forest
the fury blankets the earth
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so many are handling the contest well
the poem does justice to title with own descriptions
it reads quite cleanly and clearly, which I know is often a critique value from you... who practices it then. however, the middle line is packed a little into almost a tongue twister so perhaps just a comma would help pronunciation there. imo.
the content is nice connecting animal behavior to weather, with resonance how maybe we'd get early or alternative warning of severity seen from start.
good race of words,
babies are my subject
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Very real. I can see it clear.
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I'm with the cat!
Nice capture of image.
Marlene -
What a great visual for a haiku! Perfect choice of words. Wouldn't change a thing. Shancy.
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Awww poor little kitty! lol
Lovely work with this Haiku my
friend. It's great to read your
work again! Take care and good
luck to you with this one in the
contest!
Jeremy0826
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