In fauvist frenzy
the blues fumble
saturating smooth skin.
Jingling jutted jewels
pop to attention.
Arms akimbo
as the music moves her.
Gentlemen gawk
at gaudy garish
crimson lips clashing...
while they're gnashing their nails
to restrain their want.
Author notes
Artist of painting wishes to remain anonymous...
A contest entry
- Redhead does the Blues by natchstucco.
1266 points, ended June 22, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Very nice... I love the alliteration and the implied sensuality here... "gnashing their nails"... such a crisp image you drawn with your words... Well done!
Ken
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alas, you've done the ex wife well. lol. This background color is the brightest ive ever seen on the sight. ah yes, there are many a woman who go to the bars to drive the men like this.
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Nicely done. It captures the picture well. I enjoy thse last lines the most.
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This is such a very intriguing piece! A wonderfully descriptive piece of thought penned to convey a certain depth to the image. Nicely done!
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