When this began,
I’d never hurt so much,
When it passed,
I’d never forget as such,
Eyes red,
I never really understood,
Heart's shred,
I’d almost given up for good.
I should’ve listened,
I should’ve paid you heed,
And now I cry,
For my hasty deed.
I closed my eyes
When you needed me,
Never looked back,
Knowing what you meant to me.
The vile vine,
That I pursued,
Hushed my mind
With a grasping hood.
I didn’t see,
Where lead me it would,
And ensconced my descent,
As only life’s rose could.
And now I linger,
In these exiled lands,
Where Hope’s box,
Rests in Pandora’s hands...
***
Then in this abyss,
The light I discerned,
As you appeared,
Broken dreams were turned.
Now I lie,
In this Ecstasy,
And even though,
I leave a Gemini,
Never before,
Have I perceived,
A calming melody,
As my soul now sings.
Author notes
Okay, this is my first attempt, in my life , that I dare write poetry,and I wrote it in a way that I like to read, simple, possibly vague, but succinct nonetheless.
I cannot do "deep" poems, lol. I'm a horror-writer! Cut me some slack. XD
The Gemini allusion refers to "sense of comradship" symbolised by twins.
"Life's rose" being the beauty with thorns that I percieve life to be.
Did it even make sense, lol?
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U did well....
looking inside is the reflection from which poetry comes
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beautifully written :]
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This is lovely.
I find great penmenship here.
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Uh, yeah. I'd say that made some sense. :-P This kind of reminds me of my piece that you just commented on.... "in the abyss a light comes." Ahaha. Maybe we channeled each other?
Anyway, the piece is very captivating. It's interesting to see all the different thoughts and feelings get catapulted like that. The flow was almost 100% perfect. The line that stuck out to me as being too long was "As only life’s rose could." Perhaps you could try "As JUST life’s rose could." Just a suggestion. Either way, this is still a wonderful piece.
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this is lovely! particularly for a first try
Where Hope’s box,
Rests in Pandora’s hands...
i LOVE those lines...
great work! keep the poems coming!
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