Rapture
Downy softness
Lips touching tender skin
Succulent nectar pleasing tongue
Spreading vulva revealing juicy flesh
Soft moans uttering from within
Juices dripping down chin
Seductive taste
Of peach
Author notes
Okay this write is to test where your mind is. How many thought this was going erotic and not simply eating a fresh peach? Be honest now, haha. Okay this is a rictameter form without the first and last lines being the same.
Syllable count is 2,4,6,8,10,8,6,4,2.
In a list
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I have to admit i thought it was erotic but it is an awesome write
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Well at least we think the same, haha!!! Thanks for reading and commenting, always appreciate it.
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SNEEKY!
Oh Charley, how can you do this to us? Here we are thinking you are writting something juicey and erotic, only to find out that you are writting about eating a juicy peach!
Well I cant talk, cause' I have written along those lines as well hehehehe!
Well anyway my dear naughty friend, I enjoyed the read, yes it was erotic but in good 'taste' lol lol..no pun intended!!I love reading you as you are always a pleasure to read and you know how to get the juices flowing
Take care sweetheart and many beautiful blessings to you and your family.
Your loving friend in poetry,
~Angel~
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Thanks Angel for reading and commenting. As always I love hearing from you.
Lots of love,
Charley
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Wow....i must really have a dirty mind...I really thought this was naughty...and not about fruit. ^-^ I really liked the poem, and the form is awesome...I just wish I could do things like that. -sighs- But it was an awesome poem!!
Luna.
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Thanks Luna for reading and commenting. At least you're honest!!!!
lots of love,
Charley
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I must confess that I read the author's notes first by mistake, so I was not so taken by surprise.
This is a fine rictameter, and your imagery is wonderful.
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Shame on you reading the notes first, haha. As always, thanks for reading and commenting.
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You had me going
I was expecting Tuna!
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Haha , tuna. Thanks for reading and commenting.
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Cheers! Being the first writing excercise i encountered with this group I have a great appreciation for the rictameter form. I do have to mention though i'm glad you took the approach you did with this poem, usually i'm not quite as sensual when eating a peach, but i think this poem might read rather horrifically if it were true to my eating habbits.
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Hey, thanks for reading and commenting.
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