Times ticking
each second lasts an hour
heart is beating fast &
emptiness hugs me tight.
Her chest rises, then falls.
Her voice shaky and weak,
tears hit the pillows
I have no control.
Machines are loud,
air escapes another.
Eyes flutter open
then close…
When will they open again?
Whispers to her friends,
a kiss to her love,
good-byes that shake the core;
Vibrations shoot through me
I tremble at what’s ahead…
Vitals soar high,
her eyes dark, scared,
she reaches to me &
I freeze in place.
Why didn’t I see the cause?
Author notes
Sometimes we make a error in judgment. We know better but see things differently at that time. Tory, I love you, PLEASE hurry and get better, I am sorry for my error.
Candace
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Beautiful, yet sad...
This is an awesome, original piece, full of the fraility of human emotion and pain, a feeling of utter helplessness while hanging onto a frightful load of guilt because it is too heavy a burden to unload, chained and shackled to misery and filled to the brim with edgy, raw tension. A great exploration into the world of the regrets of yesterday, while praying for another chance to make ammends today, with hope for a brighter tomorrow. Great job!!! Peace, Cyn
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Excellent
A very fine write, and in its own way a tribute to your relationship with this person. Again, well done. I hope all goes well for your friend.
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I love her, she is here on this site, and I am merely here to pass on messages to her dear ones. Her name is Passionspromise, a woman full of love and compassion. I hope all goes well with her as well. Thanks so much for reading this piece, and for saying its excellent. I am not a poet, just a nurse.
Candace
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Your imagery is simple but affective, especially in the first few stanzas. The pensive tone is easily upheld through the poem, making it easy and enjoyable to read. I hope that you helped yourself heal a little while writing this piece.
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I'm not a poet, I am this ladies nurse. I am just waiting and figured I would jot down some words for her. More or less my feelings. I do appreciate you reading it.
Candace
(I will feel much better when this Princess comes to.) Keep her in prayer/thoughts whatever your specialty is.
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