dwindling sun
silhouetted structures
billowing dank smoke
pastel swirls~
polluted beauty
A contest entry
- RAW by Cat.
800 points, ended June 7, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - FOR ALL MY FAVS BECAUSE I AM A PAIN IN THE SOFT SPOT LOL by Swan song.
2400 points, ended July 5, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Sort of like a morning in Seattle Sometiems just nasty.
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I think you were very concise with this piece which as you know is something i really like in poetry so i completely appreciate that here.
I do think this is a bit public service announcement to me rather than more of a poetic hint at something raw.
I'm mixed on this piece because i think you did it well and i appreciate that.
thank you
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Thanks
Lol. I know what you're saying.
This could be a commercial.
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accusitory...
shameful what we've done.
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...tis the world we have made. Good luck in the contest. Love, Lane
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A raw piece with such stark, opposing imagery.
All the best with this.
Gaylene
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holy crap....this is killer...wow..flawless imagery...you are so freakin' good, you know? in eleven words, you've presented a palette of color and ripped through the senses...only you.. excellent!! love love this.
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lol
Thanks. Your reactions are always better than my poems. lol -
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you're welcome.
......my comments are not even close...you are entirely too good.lol
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