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Beyond the Telling

Your words were like dreams
big enough to touch mine  

You weaved them with wings
capturing the light of hope
that slipped around my heart

Please rearrange my life
that is now mixed and matted
calm this tangled weave
breathe me sweet...

Make me matter
for souls can touch a place
so kept, with healing

Brushstroke me with your lips
watch my defenses fall
while I wait for a deliverance
that I know I would cherish

I went to reach out and give her
a smile, like a corner table
with the chair pulled out

 

But 'No' came rushing towards me

as swift as the gust of cold wind
from the door that she closed

 

I hold the words I speak
though transient my mind spills

my amazement

down halls of hollow shouts upon

the open windows, shuttered

I now see how her load is less
and the forgotten are cast off

as dust and time perform a miracle
covering the unused things...
until they no longer matter 

In the end

it is what it is or isn't ~



 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

A contest entry for: Weaving
Take the topic and weave a free verse poem
Use weaving as a metaphor......far edge writing....

Painting By: Ruth Jones "The Weaving Lesson"
http://www.ruthjones.ca/_img/range/painting/The-Weaving-Lesson.jpg

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Comments

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  • Robin Candor
    May 26, 2008

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    You are indeed a gifted artist and writer and this why i placed you on my favorites. For moments such as these. For thought such as these. For poems such as this. I applaud you not with little clappy men, though that is deserved also. But I applaud your ability to portray the distinction between just telling a story or a thought and revealing the inner turmoil within self so vividly. I cannto produce work like this and that is ok. You are you and I am what I am as Popeye would say. Love your work, style, and correlation of us on the outside staring in at you on the inside of your writing. The beauty seeps out. RC


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    May 25, 2008

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    Wonderful imagery...and the jpg astounding to go with it..... this is far edge writing and I lvoe it.

    I have a question...I am sure I am simply not reading it correctly but
    "But, no came rushing towards me
    " - is there something missing?


  • Cannonsfire
    May 25, 2008

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    You weave spells around me with beautiful writes like this one... do not wait long to pen me more Love, Chez


  • zorphia
    May 25, 2008

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    Make me matter
    for souls can touch a place
    so kept, with healing
    ----- I love that line something within the word leaves a print in tomy heart.------------


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    May 24, 2008

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    Brilliant!!!

    I am so glad that I found your featured work tonight! This poem is simply amazing. The title to this piece is perfectly fitting and draws the eager reader into a strange, exotic world of profound, colorful, yet sorrowful fantasy. Excellent use of metaphor, with simply beautiful, though sad, imagery!! Your wonderful and memorable poem, "Beyond the Telling" will go down in history as a classic masterpiece, woven from the threads of our conflicted times. Thank you so much for sharing your painful and spell-binding thoughts with all of us. Write on, shine on, Poetess!!! Peace, Cyn


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    May 24, 2008

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    Superb

    Awesome write, indeed. Very well written, I like it just as it is with it's excellent imagery. Thanks for sharing this.


  • bonjourbunnie
    May 24, 2008

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    Very pretty. I enjoyed the use of imagery and symbolism, which were very tasteful and unique. I enjoyed the last few stanzas the best, as they conveyed a message that is often difficult to put into words. A very good piece, looking forward to seeing more!


  • ShelleyA gold member
    May 24, 2008

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    A lovely write. Very nice metaphor. Good imagery, flow and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. Vivid descriptives. You paint lovely scenes with your words. Nice closing lines. Best wishes in the contest.

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