Elephant trumpets
Water splashing, Shrubs crashing
The herd gathers round
Author notes
As strange as it may seem, I really do see these things from my room. I live and work at a safari lodge in South-Africa and the camp's waterhole is visible through my window.
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- Weekend Haiku by azure85.
600 points, ended May 28, 2008, 24 entries
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I think you should inform our lovely friends that they are also the reason why we sometimes(More than I would like!) dont have any warm water...lets just say its the extreme of breaking and entering!!!
Loved the simple word use, it puts more focus on your imagination!
Loved it!
PS-Guess what!
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The only elephants I ever saw in my room were pink!
...that was a long time ago, mind you.
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Oh delight upon delight!
I am so glad to see your haiku and admire what you say SO MUCH!
What a life! 
Thank you for sharing this with us, for your three lines are like taking a trip to visit Africa! 
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Elephant trumpets
Water splashing, Shrubs crashing
The herd gathers round
What a nice view from your window, and your AHA moment could mean more than one type of crowd. Thank you so much!
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nice array of details
imagery generated
it does seem documentary more than most view from one's dome lol. lovely
the lines read slow with full description, so one lingers longer than with a lot of haiku. maybe that's why I found typo on second line, I believe.
the latter half of that verse really perks between set ups and aha. the event is understable with a laugh.
nice emphasis with border sharing the captured feeling,
babies are my subject -
Great scene - all the noise of a gathering herd... makes you feel something else is about to happen.
Nice one.
Marlene -
Well that's quite an amazing view and Ku.
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