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What to do today - Inevitably

There are metronomes in my minds.
As my hearing declines they get louder.
Today I've decided to enjoy, relax, and be cheery.
I'd rather die of fun than Old-timers disease,

Self-indulgence than frustration.

                                                                                                             So-far I've broken even.
                                                                                                             Haven't a cue.
                                                                                                             Is it time for leave'n?
                                                                                                             For now i'll live in lieu.


Today that's how I feel.

Tomorrow, another persona

May toc into existence,

That's less smug, dismayed

At the realization: I shall not be

 

                                                                                                           Soon I shan't be extant

                                                                                                           Has my time been well spent?

                                                                                                           My life has twisted, my will has bent.

                                                                                                           Of some acts I'm proud, of some repent

 

I'll start senior aerobics, take my meds

And vitamins, eat fish and bran, give up salt,

take up crossword puzzles,write poetry,

Endevor to live better, longer

Than? Long enough to...

 

                                                                                                          Board the wrong plane,

                                                                                                          Step in front of a train.

                                                                                                          There's everything to do

                                                                                                          And nothing to be done.

Author notes

aprilnadeau #16 Have a nice day. Thank you, but I have other plans. I divided this poem into two sides of the page and itilazes one part, to represent inner divisions of thought and feeling not to quote from another source.

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  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    August 23, 2008

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    Thank you for this very unusual poem that you entered in Jade's contest. It was a joy to read.

    Love
    Sue


  • Luckintheshadows
    June 9, 2008

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    Very interesting, amusing, a little bit sad too though, just my opinion
    I really enjoyed reading this, thank you for entering my contest.

    Luck.


  • gaze
    June 2, 2008
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    This is quite uplifting, to the writer and to the readers.
    I liked the amusing way you wrote this, showing that to 'move' around and even act a little crazy can only be good for our blood pressure.
    Thanks for the smiles

    Mari


  • alesana
    May 25, 2008
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    a take on old age

    I like the song and i havent heard anything like it reall y. i dont no what points do so i dont want to applaud but otherwise its a 2