Frailty
Insanity
Unsure which is more apt
Time
Reason
Defy my grip like sand
One day you were there
Then you were not
The symphony of us
Cut short,
Far too abrupt
Was it that foolish for me
To dream and hope and pray
For love, for passion and joy
Or just to see you again someday?
How can I say
I miss you
When you were never
Mine to miss?
Is it selfish to say
I need you
When you're not
Something I possess?
Now dare I say
I love you
I guess I might
I guess I must
I love you.
What do you feel from this poem? All constructive feedback is most welcome
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i like this poem. it proves its point. ur a good writer!!=
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The rhyme and flow of this poem are great, think we can all relate to this poem, unrequited love. A good write.
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Wow I must say you placed it there great I loved it
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Wow this is a great poem. It says there's something loving there you just can't say where it is. Its a really great poem. Good job keep it up!!!!!
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awww. i absolutely loved this. it was amazing. word after word line after line. perfection. isn't it funny how simple words could create something so beautiful.
How can I say
I miss you
When you were never
Mine to miss?
Is it selfish to say
I need you
When you're not
Something I possess?
i loved that part. it was my favorite. such greatness was in them lines, loved it.
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Outstanding
What appealed to me about this poem was the flow which is excellent and the way placed the words on the page which made it easy to read and added to the over all effect. This is a sad poem about unrequited love that is full of emotion. A pleasure to read.
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i realy like this piece, truely and honestly i do. i especialy liked the ending were to the side you put i miss you i need you i love you, very well put, nice write, keep the pen flowing
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This is the declaration of th soul with a affirm notion of the heart.... I love this wonderful piece.... my friend...
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Thank you - I am glad it touched you
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hey. i really like it.
when i first saw it, before i started reading, i thought it wouldnt have a flowing rhythm... but i was wrong! it flows very well.
i admit one of the reasons i like it the most is because i can relate to it completely. actually its kind of scary how this completely describes a relationship i had last year. whoa. crap. yah
good poem.
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Hi! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I was a little hesitant at putting up 'cause I didn't know if I had the flow right or not. I think the situation is one a lot of people have experienced, but I am glad you can relate. Thanks for the comment.
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