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Dont You Remember?!?!?!

dont you remember who she is

dont you remember what shes done

 

why dont you think i can be better than her

why did why chose her

 

dont u remember who she broke

dont you remember whos heart she broke

 

whenever she breaks u or does something

you blame it on me i let u take advantage of that

now i need to move on and let you find out what everyone sees

maybe if i leave ur side even if it kills me

maybe just maybe you will stop blaming me

and get up and leave her for your better

 

i've been by ur side since day one just because you don't see me

doesn't mean i wont be waiting when you leave her

 

just remember that!!! 

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  • A-Daisy-Among-Roses
    May 25

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    your concept is good, but there isn't really any kind of flow. The begining is good but you don't need the "(not mine)" its already implied in the context. Also, i am not trying to be rude but you might want to consider useing proper grammer and not all the instant message and texing crap. - bcuz,ur, u- people wont take your work seriously. and i dont know what the heck you mean when you wrote u/does...can you explain?

    anyways I like the message you give here, the ending is nice, it shows that even though he doesnt see what he is doing is stupid he still wont completely lose you, you love him that much.

    • llaexx
      May 28
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      thank you for the advice
      i did fix all of the stuff you said
      oh yeah when i put the u/does i meant
      "whenever she breaks you or does something"