distant thunder...
closing a door
I didn't open
A contest entry
- Weekend Haiku by azure85.
600 points, ended May 28, 2008, 24 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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"you'd better come on into my kitchen
for it's going to be raining outdoors"
-Robert Johnson
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Great last line - nice and brief - gives one something to ponder about. Nice and short as well.
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Ooooo, profound extension in this one.
Good job.
Marlene -
yes .. excellent story telling purely with image/sound ... nice nice >>> Gina
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distant thunder...
closing a door
I didn't open
This is really good, you set up the suspense so well and your AHA moment is great. Thank you so much.
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