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Cloaked in Black and Metal

Lurking in the dark
Among the drifting trees
Cloaked in black and metal
Dogs whimper in fear
As you passed there gates
With your silver eyes...
Baring down in disgust

Seeing your prey
Helpless but delicious
You stay far away
As you stalk unknown

Lips quivering
for just a taste
Just a lick of her blood
Upon you golden lips
Your tongue oozing inside
your mouth
Smacking sensations
around and around
As you just
visualize the taste...
the warmth...
of her blood
Running down your throat

Your pace
Builds speed
as you flow
across silently
against the ground
No sound or wind
Passing beneath your feet

No awareness
Of your presence
She stops
Sucpisous of a follower
Looking around
dazed and confused

She feels your touch
upon her neck
A deadly kiss
you give
on the lips

Embracing her in the
Careless night
as if she was
your lover

Body tempting to move
She paralyzed

by the sight of your eyes

Your breath scowls across her neck
Like winter frost bite
aching pain
against her skin
As she stands helpless

Teeth baring
Without caring
into her flesh

Relieved by the blood
pulsing through your mouth
Your hunger being satisfied
by the catch of the night
You tighten your grip
Lusting for more

Silent screams...
Rush out of her lungs
Pupils dialating
As you try to escape the last drop

Collapsing on the floor
she lays there dead
Knowing that you have
only begin
to live

Walking away
without sympothy
you say
"One cannot live if he doesn't drink"

A contest entry

This is to a person who i think is really a vampire, i have no doubts about it. But this was my last poem before i go.

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  • kitty23
    May 28, 2008
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    wow this reminds me of a book anne rice wrote but i cant remember the name
    oh well
    very well done nice choices in words
    it seems kind of like a vampire story
    this could be the start of a book
    very cool
    thank you for sharing this peom with me
    keep up the great work
    Kitty23

    love you always


  • Wings of Insanity
    May 28, 2008
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    thanks for the comment.


  • awaiting.deletion
    May 25, 2008

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    Ehe...I had no idea I had such effects on you...hm, quite the lovely surprise. Ah, darling, you make me smile.


  • JakOb-Black
    May 24, 2008
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    ....

    umm...wow...


  • Galaxy2
    May 24, 2008

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    Wow...
    that was vampirish, honey!
    dramatic
    lustful
    almost charmed me
    interesting from the start till one reaches the last line
    a wonderful write, baby!

    Kisses....

    Galaxy2


  • XNevermindX
    May 24, 2008

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    Wow, this is such a cool poem..^_^ Really well written and, almost like a book. What do you mean this is your last poem before you go?


  • Boxingboy
    May 24, 2008
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    wow

    no this is soo cool PUBLISH


  • xDisasterous Angelx
    May 24, 2008
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    well done..i really like it...


  • XxUnforgiven-EmoxX
    May 24, 2008
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    Good

    Really well done!

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