True feelings were revealed
No words were left unspoken
Just fighting
Fighting,
Like hound dogs and alley cats
Hate and anger is released
She must pretend she is okay
Faking a smile
A laugh, a grin
Even though I know
We can never be friends
Lies,
That's all they were, she says
"He likes that ugly thing?"
Saying she didn't mean it,
Yet not willing to apologize
Even though she knows the truth
The cold hard truth
She's not me
She'll always be the pretty one
The gorgeous one
The one who'll pick herself back up
Emotions won't show
And I won't know
Why she said it
Why she meant it
And how she can go through life like that
Not caring
Putting aside other people's feelings
For her own welfare
But is she well?
No.
She is not.
She is hurting
And she is internally bleeding
Her soul is being drained
Drop by drop
Everyday precious blood
Is being replaced with stone
Till a heart is unnecessary
And no longer used
But now
There is a sliver of hope
A few drops left
Waiting to be used instead of wasted
So more may be produced
I must save her,
I say to myself,
I cannot let her wind up like the others
The others that are hurt
Yet do not feel
Who don't want to feel
Don't want to hear the truth
But somehow,
She is different
She is hurting
She can almost taste it
But in a way different from the others
She wants to change
She needs to feel the pain
So she can stop it...
Before it is too late.
Author notes
I wrote this about my friend Danielle. She's got some issues going on, and this contest inspired to just let my feelings out. I'm not really here to win the contest, but I did need to get this off of my mind. She's just got some stuff going on, and there was this big fight, and I want to be her friend, yet I don't, and I just had to get this out of my system. It's...difficult. It's a jumbled mess, I can tell you that much, and I don't mean for there to be a pattern or flow, it's just all of my thoughts all together in the contents of a poem. Thank you for reading.
A contest entry
- Drop what your doing and write what you are thinking by HereComesTheSun.
450 points, ended May 25, 2008, 25 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
So...how did I do?
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This is AMAZING! I loved it! congrats on GOLD you really deserved it! and i hope everything is working out for you and your friend!
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Everything did work out, as a matter of fact, we are all good now, and since she used to cut and whatnot, she is getting surgery in a month or so to remove her scars and she promises not to do that anymore. So yes, everything is all good. I may show her this in a little while, just not right now. Thank you for commenting!
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This is amazing as well!!! I was worried when I saw 60 lines.. but it worked!!
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Haha, yeah, everybody is always a little antsy about the length, but I make sure to work it out.
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amazing read just kept my attention the whole time GREAT JOB
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Thank you thank you!
Wow, thank you!
I can't believe it even deserved to win!
Should I show this poem to her?
And I'm just so thankful for this contest because it inspired me to just write down my feelings and hold nothing back and I'm just really, really thankful for it. Thank you so much for reading, and I'm glad it didn't bore you!
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i am very very sorry about your friend in this poem. i truly hope she will prosper and get better. maybe she will work through her issues. i liked the poem though, it was very deep and emotional. always good in poetry.
great job
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Thank you
As far as I know she is supposed to be getting help this summer and I hope she does and we aren't really friends anymore because of some stuff she said and just ughh but I do want the best for her because in spite of the fact that we aren't friends anymore I do want her to prosper
Thank you for commenting it
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