intro:
Father, i stand before You:
a broken man disillusioned in my field of dreams
smoldering ruins are all around me
the only remains of my schemes
i walk alone in the middle of the night
whispers in the dark try to give me a fright
taunting laughter rings messing with my mind
stealing my chance for peace of any kind
they’re tryin’ to confuse me
Lord, they question my sanity
i will not listen, i will not comply
it's not their choice if i live or die
trans-verse 1:
wicked vines threaten to choke, poison thorns break my skin
black clouds have become my sky,no light can enter in
rabid hounds block my way, burning eyes pierce my soul
salvation not too distant yet i can't seem to reach my goal
chorus:
i'm broken, beaten
i'm bruised 'n scarred
without You i can't go very far
Lord, i know that You are my only hope
i’m at the end of my rope
i’ve lost my sense of hope
somehow, i’ve got to find my way
if i hope to see the light of day
i have an ancient book
that will show me what to do
dust off my eyes and take a look
so I can find my way to You
trans-verse 2:
here i am in shadow, the dark forest thickens around me
in spots of light i see You, but the distance is overwhelming
i stumble, trip and fall, on my bloody knees i crawl
step by step, i can't make any headway
chorus 2:
i'm broken, beaten
i'm bruised 'n scarred
without You i can't go very far
You were broken, beaten
You were bruised 'n scarred
You died yet You rose again
Lord, i know that You are my only hope
Author notes
Style reference: Megadeth ~ Trust
In a list
A contest entry
- something for everyone by -shiningstars-.
1100 points, ended August 16, 2008, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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This is awesome! i love the meaning behind it all and it has a good flow and i can definantly picture it as a song. great job and thanks for entering
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i really like this song, i haven't heard the song that insprired it, but i really like what you have wirtten here, it's very powerful, best of luck in the contest
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This I enjoyed reading. It reminded me of those dark days when sometimes you just want to listen to some good metal music and beat that frustration away.
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Congrats wow you are just taking AP by storm!
I am proud of you,baby!
Love
me
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After i read this i got chills on my entire body. There have been many times in life where i feel just like this... and no matter how strong i think i am spiritually... you are right... reading the Bible brings back this sense of peace and encouragement. "Through ALLL THINGS God works the good of those who LOVE Him, who have been called according to His purpose" and we have been called according to His purpose. This is an absolutlely amazing message.
~kenzie
good job -
very dark and emotional poem. Well written
Best of luck -
Nice, I liked it. I can imagin this as a sort of fast paced song with some crazy megadeth riffs.
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EXcellent write here
Thankyou so much for this is the perfect one I was looking for that I also feel is what they shoukld be listening to . Great work and good luck in the contest -
this is a very good song from you. very heartfelt. i wish you the best of luck in this contest that you have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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This was a really emotional write.. there was a lot of pain and sorrow in your words.. You did a wonderful job in expressing your emotions.. Thank you very much for sharing.. I wish you the best of luck..
Angel
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Riviting.
It makes us feel like we shared in his abuse. It makes
me feel all the various trials and tribulations that the man is going through. Great write.
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Wonderful!
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very cool, has kind of tom waits feel to it.
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Amazingness!!
This tells such a great story, much enjoyed!!
Keep up the great work!
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Excellent write here
I felt the pain and the whispers of such need and the hope he so screamed to find .Great piece here
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Thank you~
I believe I was listening to a lot of Megadeth at the time I wrote this
The rawness of their lyrics gave me the freedom to explore this topic, from it's darkest corners and seeing the Light so distant.
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