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This could be avoided

Cold but clean
Its wet chill
Cannot avoid
The harshness
Filth spilling in.

It could be avoided
Not by the water
That has to receive it
But by us
All of us
The city and the citizens
All of us
Business, the country
The collective world

A contest entry

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  • penman gold member
    June 13, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Great take on the prompt. And so well worded. Best of luck in the contest.


  • micol
    June 11, 2008
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    It does fit the prompt both in its words and in its chilling fluidity. Well done.


  • Cat gold member
    May 27, 2008

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    Hi,

    Thanks for the entry. I see you took the picture literally. This actually was not meant to be a contest about pollution.

    M


  • individuality gold member
    May 24, 2008

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    a good piece to accompany the picture, aye we could all make things cleaner if we put our minds to it and worked it out.