Like the entrance of a tropical
sunrise off the blue horizon
she illuminates my world
of melancholy clouds
Bathed in the golden sunlight
of coppertone rapture
she fills my days with
sparkling lights of gaiety
Her eyes the brilliance of
enchantment, set to perfection
The glowing aura of my essence
peaks in realms of jubilation,
as she embraces me from behind
with the softness of her
enthralling touch
My life was darkness and
unfilfilled days of mourning
until she appeared from the
heavens of grace
and transformed my hopelessness
into sparks of gentle gladness
A contest entry
- Spark by zochit2me.
1375 points, ended June 12, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Nice sweet love poem. The 7th stanza kind of threw it out of flow for me because of all the other lines being just 2 long but over all a nice sweet poem.
Thank you for taking the time to enter and good luck
Becky
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very nice and sweet poem indeed
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Aww - so tender, and so true! Somehow, this poem really seems to sparkle. The way you've worded your affections along with the stunning imagery you've used just seems to make every word come to life and glow.
A very heartfelt piece that ticks all the boxes of beautiful.
The lady you had in mind seems to live and breathe in this piece.
"as she embraces me from behind
with the softness of her
enthralling touch" Magical, and beautifully written.
Best of luck in the contest, though you won't need it!
God bless,
Jess x
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rhyming couplets would be easy for this
"she illuminates my world
of melancholy clouds"
"enchantment, set to perfection
The glowing aura of my essence
peaks in realms of jubilation,"
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