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Scents of dying memories

Missing image

I am anchored to shame, drawn into flickering flames

of analytical exploration  -whispers from hell invade my

private corner as silently I scream

 

breathe me deeply inside the night,

behind curtains on the other side of noise

that fills my space as pieces of poetry fall from me

 

specks of life inside lines of crashing language

emotionally scattered sentimental phrases

faintly living inside my head

 

the substance of illuminated essence

lays deep inside, hung on thoughts

giving direction to second chances

 

A Saturday craving to live life [minus riddles]

 

stuttering syllables in the blur of yesterday’s grief

moments of silence and silhouetted smiles far beyond the realm of blinks

a fight with fate and hypnotic thoughts of death

 

all memories need a funeral…

closing chapters fallen captive to slow injections of reality

while remnants of flesh heal

 

reflections of solitude emptied into a new sketch

at the end of a single sigh

scattering soft in pastel rhythms of defining silence

 

 …untangling beauty in a paint by number scheme

on a mission to find [self]

somewhere in years behind scents of dying memories

 

 

 

 

 

5/24/08 

Author notes

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  • amaranthine lover gold member
    July 1, 2008
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    I really like this, but I cannot place you any higher then honourable mention until you condense some of these lines into 25 or less because those were my posted guidelines. Please do so, I really found this piece awesome and would love to see it possibly place higher, thank you.


    • zochit2me gold member
      July 1, 2008
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      Okie dokie...
      I condensed it as you requested. Now 23 lines.

      I hope it is still appealing to the eyes

      Thank you for allowing me to do that...

      ☼Becky☼


  • marlene47 silver member
    June 1, 2008

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    Very powerful beginning... anchored to shame!
    I liked => breathe me deeply inside the night, the other side of noise, the lines and phrases living inside your head, your essence hung on thoughts, blur of yesterday's grief, memories need a funeral, remnants heal, the end of a single sigh.
    Very gripping. I wish you well as you move further with your mission to find yourself in untangled beauty. Congratulations on the HM!
    Marlene


  • Lucy.
    June 1, 2008

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    Wonderful! Wow, so much said in this piece. Some beautiful language used. I like the way you have opened this and your ending is also very strong. Thank you for your entry.


  • albymyheart gold member
    May 24, 2008

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    Outstanding!

    I am nearly speechless after reading this. You have expressed this piece on memories in such a beauitful way using so many metaphors to enrich your thoughts. I like how reader can apply their own memories to this as they read.

    It has that reflective feel throughout, which is what we do when we sit alone with memories and comforts in a soft eloquence. Extremely good.

    alby

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