Possibilities?
Can it be the rising of the tide
And eloquence is lost to the fool
A chatter of finks, designated hitters
As they clamour for the sacred flesh
Seekers of glory condemning the boor
Can it be though,
some words refreshing appear
Just a poem tendered with care
My eyes sting at times,
for sex just seems to guide the choir
And lust brings out the flock
But can it be one poet
That stands and fights for those denied
Possibilities, a sweet surprise
By Bob Fox
A contest entry
- Tell Me What You ... by sassykitty.
390 points, ended June 1, 2008, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I'm not sure what upsets people about this poem. Am I missing something? Lol.
Anyhow, another great write here. Well done!
Kel
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wow... what I found with this poem... was 'possibilities for the fool' is this true? because ... well never mind me. But I felt this was deep. how did you write this? prettypoetry ♥
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Sush True Words
Well Bob you have captured how many are on here. Sex and sexual poems do seems to becoming more the norm on here. I have noticed how the contests are going that way too. But there are a few good ones.I myself have been on less and less because things have changewd on here. Some but not all want to be someone else here and not their true selves. I find it refreshing when I see someone has flaws as I do and is honest about it. I guess they can be the perfect lover in their fantasy world. Life needs balance and so does poetry. Everything in moderation as my one dear friend told me. You keep writing dear friend . Someomne has to keep their feet to the fire.
You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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Sandy
Balance.. Now that is the key word for group poetry. But where is it. It is just sex, sex & more sex people being what they cannot be in true life. Funny but if I lied on my profile I may be the dream in many older AP womens bed lol -
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Yes my friend but sooner or later those dreams turn into nightmares when the truth comes out.
And besides truth and good always wins over lies and evil.
Take care my friend.
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Nicely developed. Best of luck to you in the contest!
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I like it, I like it.You are good at getting this point across.Well done my friend, Ros
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Outstanding
There was alot that I liked in this. You raise questions and the reader is left to contemplate the truth. There are some brilliant lines especially:
And eloquence is lost to the fool
I thought this poem was cutting edge using language in an innovative way and showing a lot of creativity. Best of luck in the contest.
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This is uniquely written. Quite cool.
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"And eloquence is lost to the fool".....
Bob, that line is earth shatteringly true.
Lust is appart of us all, but I agree people waste away in it for sure.
Great write sweetie~ Sorry I havent been around so much lately.
Delila
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"Eloquence is lost to the fool"
Very beautiful line - the main reason that I kept reading.
The syntax you use is unique and fun to read, adding small twists to phrases that would be less beautiful worded any other way.
I love your descriptions and word selection.
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Another strong piece on this subject Bob.. written eloquently!
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sadly
Jackie there are many good poets tha get ignored by the snobs on here. The gamers, groupies & sex crazed people that dominate AP & that is sad -
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I'm not sure I agree Bob.. those people stick together and the good poets search out other good poets... that's how groups work...
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Outstanding!!!
Excellent subject matter, and profound use of metaphor:
"for sex just seems to guide the choir
And lust brings out the flock"
I love this piece, it is so intelligent and stands heads above everyone else here on AP... Good luck in the contest, and Congratulations on a Great job!!! Peace, Cyn
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I found this poem to be strong in message and also caring in thought. Bravo my friend
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Thankyou
Very much enjoyed reading this poem. Thanks.
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Bravo
This is very good and it comes with open arms often to those so sad and dreay they feel they are lost to all and then they read a poem and it is as though it were written just for them .Good write here and so true indeed
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thanks
It seems some snobs on her forget how they got started. everybody deserves to be heard
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definitely an original take on the prompt- i'm not too sure if i fully understand all of it, but that's probably my loss.i particularly like your use of personification for lust and sex, that's very effective in pointing out how powerless we can be against such dynamic elements. i also like the way you discuss the process of writing itself. Thanks for being different, and for sharing, good luck in the contest.
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