There's something as cold as winter
Deep inside of me
Its sending painful quakes
I've forgotten how to plea
Its making my breathing short
And making love hard to find
But its kind of ironic
That its me
My heart
And mind
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Good use of emotion and mood
I like this
Very well penned
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Nice, i feel excatly the same, but you put it in words so well. >.< You are good at this, really good!
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cool. no pun intended though. I am kinda cold now... weird.. maybe its the background reminding me of a couple months ago... or your chilling words.. Really super awesome. write more! ya ya I'll shut up now
Kat
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very nice..lovely write..i enjoyed it...no critism for you!! but i think your poetry would get even better if you use more complicated words..Your smart..let your inner poet show through creative and dolled-up words!
Blessed Be,
Brandy Marie-Aurua Beisser
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