sweetly cold marble holds
my daily kitchen in antique
moments of old world charm
and inviting seconds of wet
sensory appetites to control
with nature's reward and bits
of yesterday's bread with wine
creating a perfectly balanced
picture for my pleasure, a
collection of worn stoneware
combines with unpeeled fruits
and scents of ripened warmth
Author notes
picture prompt (click to view)
http://allpoetry.com/images/ext/Contest/2406/513.jpg?1211637898
12 lines
A contest entry
- Response to still life Allpoetry. Sponsored by Winklings. #90. by Lyndon.
6000 points, ended June 26, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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The phrase "ripened warmth" is apposite because the painter has used warm colours. It has been a pleasure for me to read your poem and not to be tempted to look up at the picture! I do not need to. Clarity ... yes. What is sweetly cold marble? I guess it is a response to the portrait that is treasured by you. You have convcinced me that this painting has pleased your senses.
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...scents of ripened warmth. I wonder if they stand within those two tall wine bottles, holding fast a kitchen of unity?
Nice work. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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Hi Poetess,
Once again, you have caught the detail with blinding clarity.
Bread, red wine, and apples, all I need is some strong cheese to make a perfect meal.
I’m learning,
Love, Peter
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The imagery in this poem is wonderful.
These first two lines grabs the reader and doesn't let go
sweetly cold marble holds
my daily kitchen in antique
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Wow, this is a stunning piece of poetry. You have portrayed the picture wonderfully here. Imagery is fantastic. Good luck in the contest.
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Clear, visible and nice description of yesterday's memories preserved within the lines of your poetry. Nice done.
~Sonja~
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