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someday maybe then

 

 

 

 

 

this quiet clock may settle
hands-
rest palms in sunlit patches
of hovered "I-know" smiles.
 
of circles sketched, eyes

might sigh, filtered

by finger-light,

 

content to touch her other

face and the silence unspoken.
 
and arms could embrace

all mystery-

 

of sun and moon,

of pearls drawn from warmth

and blended shadow- from a bed

of bruises, softly held

against those gathered
years,


as small and round

as we might be,


rusted timid

like the breath that trembles

broken under breast,
 
for now, within each pause

a stone

sits idle in my eye, shifts in tide

of narrow skin.

 

 

 

this calligraphy of moments
falls between.
 
 
 
 
 

 

 

 

 

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  • Rowan gold member
    May 27

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    Oh, kate, this made me feel all weepy. No small feat for this hard ass, lol. So stunning. So many lines I wish were mine.


  • libithina
    May 25

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    Dear Wanda pointed me this way to you Kate .. So glad that she did for you have penned a very poignant and thoughtful write dear Kate ..
    may that 'quiet clock' 'settle hands' to rest in 'sunlit patches' just lightly 'finger-light'
    brush and 'touch' 'embrace' and be as a bed of 'roses' for you dear Kate .. as a soothe 'softly
    held' and caress away ..
    The imagery and analogy of the 'stone' is staggering ..
    Pearls for you, sun and moon for you, s
    s s and Kate for this stunning and hearttouched write Lib x



  • Eusebius
    May 24
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    bravo

    Full of wonderful poetic phrasing throughout... a quietly mood-evoking piece... a fine poem... bravo... bravo...

  • What a lovely gentle feeling to this

  • Wanda directed me to this beautifully expressed write and I AM OH SO GLAD SHE DID! Impeccable Kate!!!!!


  • LadyUnique silver member
    May 24

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    simply breathtaking. your words crash over me, rest... then slowly rise so i can soak in them... they make me feel so not alone


  • Rovingone gold member
    May 24

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    I like the symbolism in this poem. a stone sits idle in my eye, shifts in tide of noarrow skin. And, pearls drawn from warmth and blended shadow from a bed of bruises softly held against those gathered years. But, most of all sunlite patches of I know smiles. I love the I know smiles. So nice when you have those with someone special. This is a poem that makes you think. We need more of those!

  • Nicolette gold member
    May 24

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    "this calligraphy of moments" - that one line was enough for me because it's so very beautiful... it lingers in the eye and the mind. Simply beautiful poetry that touched me in a very special place tonight, Kate... surperb!!

    ~ Nicolette


  • jantastic gold member
    May 24

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    A strong ending to a, those last two lines are great, leaving the tone to linger. Some nice use of line breaks as well, especially the pause with the stone.

  • "of sun and moon,
    of pearls drawn from warmth
    and blended shadow- from a bed
    of bruises, softly held
    against those gathered
    years,"


    Breathtaking, such powerful diction and
    imagery, all the best in the contest.


    Love and peace always,
    mj.


  • Peteskid gold member
    May 24

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    very nice...words reach to the reader softly yet persistently, seem to ask for recognition and understanding, and this reader nods and adds remembrance...thank you...PK


  • kaibab silver member
    May 24

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    So wondrous a poem...between rainbow and rain...wise is wave of waking grave...just beautiful

  • oh my goodness, Kate..... this is incredible penning..... beautiful words indeed.....

  • ecrivain01 silver member
    May 24

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    Wanda (Night Hope) suggested ...

    that I check this out. It is, indeed, an excellent job. I too like the use of calligraphy there, but actually the whole poem works very well as is, so I find it difficult to pick out anything in particular.

    I would like to post this on my blog, if you have no objections?

    poetsporch.blogspot.com/



  • Night Hope gold member
    May 24

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    "this calligraphy of moments
    falls between."

    This is such an incredible literary achievement, my Friend. I still write in longhand & my own variation of calligraphy. The very act, the art of writing is as important to me as the end results.

    "rusted timid
    like the breath that trembles
    broken under breast"

    Sighhh...How well I know these lines. Intimately. A beautiful piece, penned by a delicately knowing hand. Good luck in Suzanne's contest, Sweetie. Your talent is undeniable. Wanda


  • dehydrated
    May 24
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    love how it ends.

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