Other Side by kiwigirljacks at All poetry

I dance dutifully

a prisoner to my profession

demanding my grace and beauty

bound to it's rhythm, yet inhibited

She soars free

in her sensuality unbound

asking only for desire's return

limitless in her spirit, uninhibited

And as I gaze at her... I am whole

For she is my ebony reflection

The other side of my soul

Author notes

Prompt: Pic, 30-60 words

In a list

Trophy: Gold • next in list

A contest entry

PIF......pic inspired by CinfullyDelicious. 1250 points, ended May 24, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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notorious
August 26
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I'm lazy, but I liked. Nice Gold.
Thomas Scott
July 7

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Bingo!
You've been poking around inside, haven't you?
This is a solid product of some sound introspection and, of course, craftsmanship.
PerfectImperfection
June 4

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Beautifully penned take on the image prompt. A great depth of detail to serve the thoughts well. Excellent penning!
Leila
June 3
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Awesome take on the prompt, VERY deserving of gold sis! Amazingly creative! x
The Unknown Poet1
May 30

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beautiful and spot on! again I get the feel this is more personal then one might assume. To dance in the light without scorn or rejection or judgement is a gift only we ourselves can give to ourself you are surely a poetess with passion and deep feelings yet inhibited other then on paper
penman
May 29
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excellent
Oh my such an incredible creation. So very well done. Congratulations on the gold.
PerfectImperfection
May 28
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Such a deeply intriguing piece, going along well with the image prompt. Nicely done!
SuicidalLover
May 26

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Wow! This does deserve the gold. I mean wow...talk about depth. *nods head* You win hands down. Perfect words tell a story in little time. Congrats!
~Kystal Angel
Lucy.
May 25

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Great take on the prompt! Nice flow, congratulations of the gold.
runewalker
May 25

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These are the phrases that most moved me:

"demanding my grace and beauty bound to it's rhythm"

This is especially fruitful and moves like a dancer...

"her sensuality unbound asking only for desire's return"

bittersweet ... a bound longing, unleashed

"as I gaze at her... I am whole...
...reflection...The other side of my soul"

Have you ever been in one of those funhouse mirrors rooms where your reflection is futher reflected into infinity by a facing mirror... what infinity is in this phrase.

many small vignettes here, small and large..
Weltt
May 24

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A wonderful flow to this. The second stanza blew me away!! Another well deserved gold. What a beautiful little gem of poetry. thank you for sharing this!!!
MJ Donnelly
May 24

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Well deserving of gold Jacks! A most energetic and sensual write dear.

Love and peace always,
mj.
Valley Girl
May 24

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Awesome take on the prompt! You have went beyond with this one! We all have another side to us that is just waiting to be unlocked and be free! Excellent! Congratulations on the Gold. ♥
solo wisp
May 24

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ahhhhhh ... yes, awesome awesome and awestruck by your definitions hidden in mind of picture!

Congrats on the gold loverly ... truth be known, worthy of so much more than gold!

Steve
KayJay46
May 24

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I knew this was gold before I got to the end... What an inspired write... and telling of your self (LOL)... Beautiful in form and flow...
Ken
aboomer
May 24
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WOW! GREAT wording on this!! (neat pic)....Congrats. on the well-deserved Gold!!!
In Too Deep1
May 24

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An amazing take on the prompt. I loved the flow and imagery in the epic soul searching writ. Beautiful use of emotion, alliteration and movement. Well deserving of gold. Congrats on your win.
Bob Fox
May 24

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well Jackie
A little soul searching never hurt anyone my eloquent friend. The dark side exposed I think. But there is much more beauty
CinfullyDelicious
May 24

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This has a great rhythm and I love where you took the pic with such poetic words

Thank you so much, a great write
Good luck

Cin
Lil-Bit Crazy
May 24

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wow....... what an amazing poem and an amazing pic..... thank you for sharing this and good luck....!
Dalaney
May 24
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you get an A+ for an outstanding ending to an already fantastic write :) Love, Lane
mds5158
May 24

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Wow, this picture prompt would have probably put my writing to a dead halt. It's a very hard image to apply an interpretation to, but you've done beautifully as always. It definitely reflects the imagery in the picture and it is in and of itself a beautifully crafted write. Great job.
chiefmac
May 24

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What a search for that soul who lie behind the mirrored reflection. Caught within a spirit uninhibited and desires a relief to still how life inhibits her emotion.
arafura
May 24
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Great work as usual. Your interpretation of the image is wonderful. Good luck in the contest!
Swangrnv
May 24

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Stunning
The picture is great, the story even better! You are the 'queen of the quickies' my friend! looks like gold to me!
LadyDementia
May 24

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Awesomely done! Love that pic! You have done it much justice. It could go in so many ways (minds buzzing..lol)The last verse rounds it off perfectly, a superb write hunni, all the best in the contest
perfectsunset
May 24

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Amazing
Wow this described the picture perfectly and originally!! I love the last lines they stuck out to me most "For she is my ebony reflection The other side of my soul" -- such beautiful imagery!! Loved this one!
Good luck in Cin's contest!
Angelflower
May 24

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ooh.. this is really good sis!! I really love it.. You always do so great with these! I would've done something freaky.... or something like that!! great job!!! best of luck!!

Angel