again, they are fighting against each other
without any reason
it doesn't matter if there will be
a few more or less victims
the only fatal thing would be giving in;
being weaker than the enemy
each victim is only a number
part of a large statistic of success
necessary for the greater good
they say they want peace
but the weapons speak another language
they are sitting in leather chairs
drinking their damn iced drinks
while the masses outside are dying
but the easiest way
has always been
leaving the people to suffer and die alone
while a few select
enjoy the privileges of wealth
and again they are calling for war
another attack; another amount of casualties
that don't matter
this time
they will conquer the world
Author notes
Looking for a good title... and I'd like to hear your opions on whether the last two lines should be changed...
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I think it's very good. Of course it puts me in mind of Isreal and Palestine but applies to all war. Well written, impressive, Annie.
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Thank you!
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Bandit Auction #7
I like the last two lines how they are
as for the title, I'm horrible at titles too - so maybe something like Conflict and Conquer (so it fits in with the last line), or Casualities of Conflict (because you talk lots about the casualities) ... but yeah 
I'm not so great at titles 
... the poem itself I really enjoyed - you have a wonderful sentiment in these lines and it gives me hope that if the next generation is more like you (and hopefully me ) then the world is going to be pushed onto the right track 
wonderful!
Keep writing
Polly
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How about World Order..
I really like it when people get down and make
waves into sheer reality, Someone makes the weapons, and the bullets and the tanks and missiles and someone very big ----gives the orders.
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I think in the long run, there is no profit in war. Everyone suffers, the land suffers, and in the end, we are no better off than we started. -
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Ann,
This is poignant social commentary. The 'elite' orchestrating wars for their personal prosperity while the less fortunate pay the ultimate price without ever tasting of the spoils of victory. Well Done!
As for a title suggestion: "Vulgar Disparity"
Best of luck in the Bandit Auction.
Brother dennis
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...How about:
'Callousness in Conflict'
'Conflict in Callous Colours'
'Callous Colours of Conflict'
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A bold and oh-so-true statement about those who create and dictate the lives and deaths of the masses who 'serve' them: Fat Cats rule. Never a truer word spoken!
A thought-provoking poem here, Sweet Pea. Especially for one so young ~ it's reassuring to see the young generations coming through with such strong ideas about war and peace. BRAVO!
A humble title suggestion: 'The Curse of Conflict'
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hey there!
thanks for your comment, I talked to a friend of mine, and we think your suggestion is the best so far, although I'm not 100% satisfied with it yet
do you have any other suggestions (similar ones, maybe containing the word "conflict" - maybe in a more metaphorical way...?) making up titles is my weakness, so any thought yo have on this issue is appreciated. 
Annie
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Thanks, Annie...
I'll have to have a think about this!
Lou x
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A powerful piece, with good descriptions and flow all the way through, leaving one more nervous than before! I too think the last two lines are fine, they pack a punch, and in view of that the title might be "Conquest". A good read!
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The battle rages on might be a good title for this poem>I definatly would not change the last two lines,they need to be there.It helps the overall tone to this poem.You write very well and I agree with the message.You were easy to understand and so many of us relate to and agree with this.Great job.
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Thank you, I'll take your suggestion into consideration.
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Any special topic you wrote this poem about?
First had to think of a destroyed family until you mentioned the weapons, then of Nazis, the Vietnam war, kind of Iraq soon...
Is it generally spoken about wars?
Really good, just confusing that you wrote the poem in capital letters only.
The end seems a bit hyperbolic to me, maybe to soon. Anyway good work and so true words.
Jo
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uh, don't know, to be honest.
die in großbuchstaben sind alles zeitungscollagen wo ich nur immer n paar wörter eingefügt hab...
muss ndir irg.wann mal die originale zeigen.
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Powerful!
I think the caps show the intensity of your feeling, but I wouldn't make a habit of it! Strong write for someone so young. Way to go... I know how you feel about this. It's easy to feel this way without knowing all that's going on & really there's so much going on right now! I do believe we need to defend those who can't defend themselves & to fight against the forces of tyranny. If we don't learn the lessons of History we are bound to repeat them! Father help us all. Keep up the fine writing & expressing your passion. All the best in the contest.
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Thank you so much for the wonderful comment!
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This is a very good poem, the caps to me kinda distract me from the poem, it gets kinda annoying personally.
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Ahhh.... an image is coming to mind...
Aye, all the world's biggest computer geeks are at war with one another to see who can capture most of the world's wealth. 
As it is, they have us all prisoner... each citizen sitting in front of a screen.
lol Coolness, Annie! Love your big-font poems!
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