Mary is a bridesmaid
see her lovely dress,
mum told her “Mary”
don’t get in a mess,"
now Mary did not listen
and ran down to the gate
to show her pretty dress off
to Bobby and his mate
Bobby picked some flowers
and said,
"These are what you need”
and pushed them into Mary’s hand’s
but the flowers were all weeds.
She threw them on the garden
then looked down at her dress,
the muddy little posy
had made an awful mess.
she ran back to the house and cried
but the muddy dress she could not hide.
Mom said,
“Don’t cry dear we just have time
to save the dress from Bobby’s crime."
she worked real fast in the window light
creating an apron of lacy delight.
as she wrapped it on with a big wide bow.
the bride was calling.
“Here comes the car, come on let's go” .
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A contest entry
- Rhyme and Flow part 3 New - 50,000 points series by cricketjeff.
4000 points, ended June 15, 2008, 51 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Thank you for this lovely entry in our contest. It was a pleasure to read and bought a smile to both our faces.
Congratulations on the HM, it was well deserved and we look forward to reading more from you in our future contests...Sue and Jeff
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Oh...soooo nice. Quaint, old fashioned images come to mind as I read this. It tells a lovely story of a brief moment in time. I just really loved it.
Crit: Punct - The second quotation mark should be placed after the word "mess" in the first section of the poem (although I know you would know this).
To me, this poem is truly inspiring. I would like to write something like this and you've got my mind thinking now.
alby
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