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once there was a you and I

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sobs of loss
my only companion

I walk a desolate forest
filled with skeletons

motionless against
winds of sorrow,
limbs weighed down by
broken promises of
forever

reaching river beds;
                                dry

once overflowing with
                                    life

pondering my future
                                        I sit


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  • lindaburns gold member
    May 26, 2008

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    Your work certainly mirrors the desolation felt after the promise is broken and the river that once overflowed runs dry. I pray for rain.

  • imahealer
    May 24, 2008

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    The title pulled me right into this arid time in your life. The placement of those three words, I usually don't like, but here, it added more meaning to the poem. IT reminds me of a few of the old poets I have read for years. I can feel the angst and the loneliness of a lover wilting and pining. IT takes a really great poet to make the reader FEEL the write. You did this in metaphors divine. This contest is now going to be very hard to judge. Thank you so much for your verse.

    Shana


  • Cannonsfire
    May 24, 2008

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    Love it, the three words are a stand out...the dry and arid feeling of nothing in a life and the feeling of stillness in contemplation of where and what to do next. Love, Chez