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Miscela del cobalto

Life's last hope
did drip from the chin
of a Sicilian brute,
gone the way of a drunkard.

Against a pear-tree promise
did he set canister abrupt;
almost etching a spider's nest
throughout the porcelain base.

From a sun-soaked stance,
brushes were tossed about.
Within a wormwood framing
sprawled a canvas mouth, hungry.

 

Saving the last eraser

requires chewing stale loaves.

Half-crusted thrones

for Roma's plums to reside.

 

A return to the easel

while fornicating with a theory

that villagers may trade labor

for the mirror of a madman's quarters.

 



 

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  • ecrivain01
    July 5, 2008

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    Perhaps the "blue" ...

    in the painting is the artist's mood?

    I agree with Lyndon about "did drip" and the other instance you used "did" with another verb, but that's virtually the only thing that detracts in this. You certainly do often find unique things to write about, or unique ways of writing at any rate.


  • Lyndon gold member
    June 25, 2008

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    Mixture of Cobalt ...

    'did drip' is not usually phrased thus in modern verse or contemporary classical.
    Mixing chemicals to get the desired colour was an artist's secret often. This poem treats the painting in a continuous sense. Cobalt blue is well-known but so are other shades using cobalt salts. They vary from a lovely reddish blue, sea blue through plum, turquoise to sea or cerulean green.
    However, Julian Merrow-Smith, a Briton living in France, is a C21 painter of this.
    Your lyric come narrative relates a good story. Certainly, he did not paint in Sicily or Palermo.
    I probable would have used the word 'palette' in your context rather than "easel".
    Thank you for this poem.
    Lyndon of the Winklings.


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    June 11, 2008

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    A very interesting verse pertaining to this painting prompt. Quite the story and I like the title very much.
    I did have to use a translation to understand it though and find it quite interesting that cobalt can reference a shade of deep of blue, and there is no evident blue in this painting.

    I liked this very much. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela


  • Sonja
    May 25, 2008

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    I do not know why but this one somehow reminds me of Bukowski... interesting and intriguing poetry.
    ~Sonja~


  • malmadre gold member
    May 24, 2008

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    Most artists are madmen and madwomen and we always hope that someone will find something pleasing in the visions of our quarters... I like that thought anyway. I imagine people who paint pots and fruit have maybe run out of subject matter. I think that you took a detailed view of the prompt and did it justice.


  • aboomer silver member
    May 24, 2008

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    WOW

    Amazing wording for this!! Just perfect for that picture! Outstanding images.
    GREAT job!!!
    best wishes in your contest.

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