I'll check you at the palace door
There is no point in lying past this point,
anymore
I found red,
where you claim clear green
If beauty and bounty mean anything,
just come clean
I saw you in my melodic rain
I feel you in my fields of pain
And I wonder if you wonder too,
what it would be like if I left you
To be the only one,
taming life's feral gun
'Cuz when the wind comes strutting in,
your cover is completely blown
Time take aim
and get a piece of my own
Take a seat on my own throne
Time to shut the door
To end this warped war
Your kind aren't welcome,
in my kingdom,
anymore
whats going on in your portals girls and boys?
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Poetry in motion.
Steadfast deliverance for setting your boundary's. The character to which you speak may be myth or tangible yet you ward off their intrusion. Bravo!
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A great piece since the lines written here provoke deep thoughts to the reader especially with emotion/s placed in the words penned here ^^
Good work, I must say
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I like this one a lot. You tell a complicated tale of emoitins through simple words and imagry.
The rhyme and form arent something I enjoy at all, but I found myself forgetting about it. Impressive.
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Hmmm... This isn't as descriptive as I would like it to be... It was just to the point and nothing more.
However, what you did say was emotionally there and powerful.
Excellent write 
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how can i put what i have in mind in words???
simply amazing and even more!
i don't know .. when i was reading this i felt like the words were so light and yet they hold great meaning
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this piece is amazing! I was held rapt the entire read and it left me thinking about my own relationships. Great write. -mandie- -
Great idea, creating a fortress that only allows the invited in. We forget we are the temple and need to keep candles lit on the shrine.
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cool, the flow is kinda shaky but its still a great poem. i love the last stanza. Great write!
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