Busy as a bee,
You're flitting here and there.
Oh won't you take the time
to come and be with me?
I've been waiting for an hour;
I've not been trying to hide.
Oh why don't you take an hour
and sit with me by the wayside?
It's as if life is timed
by work dealines in reality.
There's no more time for dreaming -
it's not in sync with reality.
I, the flower - you, the bee;
I the dreamer, a kink in your reality.
But life is short...Oh, please-
take the time to come and be with me!
Author notes
'Pink Trees' - Inspired by the lyrics.
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A contest entry
- I need something inspiring... by Megy206.
525 points, ended June 14, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Only Hope by only1love4ever.
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Wow that is crazy good. I like how you made it about a bee and a flower, but you and another. It is unique and very entertaining. It's short and sweet and too the point and say exactly what you mean.
Busy as a bee,
You're flitting here and there.
Oh won't you take the time
to come and be with me?
This is my favorite stanza.
I say that all the time. I am as busy as a bee and I've no time for this...lol
So here you say, won't you just take a little time to come and be with me?
I've truly enjoyed this poem.
Thank you for your wonderful contribution.
It is much appreciated.
Have a great day.
God Bless.
Good luck.
~Only1love4ever
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This was a very wonderful piece obviously written with enthusiastic dedication and careful thought. It was lovely, easy to read (there were no places that required re reading to find the rhythm for which you were searching), and real. The feeling of neglect was very apparent and well presented. Thank you for your entry.
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LIFE IS SHORT, INDEED!
I, the flower - you, the bee;
I the dreamer, a kink in your reality.
But life is short...Oh, please-
take the time to come and be with me!
GOOD LUCK in all of the contest that you have entered this piece in, my lovely friend! Even if it has been said many times before - it deserves saying once again - especially in these very busy days when no one takes the time along the way to stop and smell the roses (metaphoric or otherwise) that are right in front of them if they'd only take a moment to see - that life is VERY SHORT, to say the least! The older I get the more I realize that my Grandfather and Grandmother were right when they said - it's all over in the blink of an eye - so you have to make every moment count - for no one knows the hour until it comes! Being a photographer - as well as a poet who has published nearly 30 books since 2004 - most of poetry and several of poetry with my photography - I was impressed by the presentation and photograph that you used with this delightful piece!
Love & Peace!
Earl.
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nice one!
like the clever use of imagery, and to be fair the rhyme isn't strained and works - hats off to you, i can't do that at all. nice take on the prompt and not the usual subject matter. thanks for sharing and good luck in the competition. cheers -
very lovely
I love nature,
I alway wonder where everone is rushing off too.
we miss out on such beauty.
I find that when I slow down
and take time to enjoy life
everything still gets done.
that is faith, I wish I would of known this years ago.
your poem is very lovel
God bless m friend...
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