A light touch with a wince,
by hands pushing secret desires floating on the wind.
With the turning of a head to stare at the grass where friend once lay,
chanting a litany of rebukes refusing to exhale past occupied lips.
Hands run down in a backward version of play.
Stripping dignity and gently laying it aside.
A moan in victory for all it shows, and a cry so that no one ever knows.
Breathing across nightly show and tell.
Never to be delivered from an earthly not quite anguish.
A gentle push to the side for the start of performance of a perfect alright.
Bright smiles a plenty to amend by an one sided discomfiting caress of hand on hand.
Grimace as fingers brush with pull back as quick as can be.
Dreams never cease back into the sand.
Over and over to be repeated if only in a memory.
Release in no way attainable in rest for the weary.
With one more tragic goodnight,
eyes close for one less goodbye.
A contest entry
- Deep Thoughts by aboomer.
700 points, ended March 15, 26 entries
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Comments
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I really did search this for the deep quality that everyone saw, and at first, I couldn't quite find it. But, I will admit, there is depth there. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.
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Oh my, this was marvelous. I really liked the poetic devices you used, and how you used them so well. Deep and full of emotiong. Great job on this and good luck in the contest.
Josh
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Great job with this piece!
Very deep write. Marvelous imagery and I love your word usage.
Bravo!!!
♥ kate
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I really like your wording and the depth in this. Great emotion. I like it all but especially,
'Dreams never cease back into the sand.
Over and over to be repeated if only in a memory.
Release in no way attainable in rest for the weary.'
Nicely done!
thank you for your entry
best wishes in the contest
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it seems no matter how much time passes memories like these never fade. abuse scars us for life. while the outside scars may heal, the inner ones, the ones that can't be seen on the outside take forever to heal. I can tell you from my experience, the pain may lessen with time, but the memory lingers on.
I applaud you for being able to get this out, I'm sure it was painful to do.. yet you did it.
love you lots
kat
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