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Unconditional

When I look at you I see a spitting image of perfect love
I see soft, knowing eyes and I feel that warm embrace
I see visions of steaming adventures under blankets
And all I can think of is how lucky I am to have you
I apologize for holding you back form the life I know you deserve

I love you with all that I am

With all that I know how to give

You are my reason for breathing

Your smile gives me goose bumps and makes me want you more

The way you shake your head and say no, even though you want me, too

Something about preserving my dignity, like they did way back when

That is why I love you

All you want in this world is to make me happy

And all I want is for you to make yourself the same

It's not fair that you stay here for me when you could do so much better

Damn you! Why do you care for me so deeply?

I guess I don't mind.

It is kind of nice to have someone who really just wants to know,

"How was your day, baby?"

 

A contest entry

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  • DarkShard
    March 30

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    Lovely take on love. I am afraid that your puctution and spelling pulled you down. all becasue you didn't read through and spellcheck. from instead of form in the beginning lines. and when you witch subjects allow a comma or a full stop or even a simple line break to help guide the readers eyes through your story, without this there is no tension, no interest, no impact.
    do you agree?


    • reeseXtheXsoldier
      March 30
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      hhmmm.. not quite ... I rearely use puctuation because this piece is supposed to have a surreal effect so that the reader may take is anyway he chooses... it's not for me... it's for him...


  • Janjan
    October 23, 2008

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    A+++++

    Dear XReeseXBaileyX: Very nicely written love poem. I feel your emotions coming through. Sincerely, Janjan xoxo Sorry so long to read yours.


  • offlimits
    August 17, 2008
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    this is sweet thanks
    good luck and god bless love cassie


  • Poetic Obscenity
    July 30, 2008

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    Awe

    This is so very gorgeous. You've written a brilliant piece here. It's so very beautiful. The feeling i get from this is one of love and pure emotion. Lovely.


    Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    July 13, 2008

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    This is great

    Yes often less is more for when you love one another it doesnt mean love in a physical way but a love that lasts with joy and a feeling of competion when they are near


  • z etoile
    July 11, 2008
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    Wow this is deep and intense love. I liked this piece and it is a poem of true love great job and thank you for entering my contest.

  • z etoile
    July 11, 2008

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    Wow this is deep and intense love. I liked this piece and it is a poem of true love great job and thank you for entering my contest.

  • Dave-C
    June 1, 2008

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    Congratulations my dear on winning gold in my wife's contest
    I can clearly see why she picked this poem as the winner. You show much maturity and insight for one so young.
    This is a stunning dedication to your partner and well worthy of your trophy.

    Dave


  • ShaddowsDarkened
    May 31, 2008

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    another creative poem

    You guys here bring such beautiful poems, and this is most certainly one of them. it brings such truth into the beautiful words. they speak for so many lives that people lead. how we care for those who believe they do not deserve it, yet, somehow they do. thank you for sharing this with me and all the others here.

    good luck in the contest,
    keep writing,
    holly x

  • Janjan
    May 31, 2008
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    A+

    Dear Wrhapsody: Unconditional is very powerful writng for someone so young. I am 43. I can really feel your emotions. Keep writing. Much Love, JanJan P.S. Try Destiny, mine, and tell me what you think. I think we both feel really deep inside. that's good for someone my age.


  • peridotPixi
    May 30, 2008

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    Wow this poem is awsome i really like the detials you have put into this poem, i love how it is deffiantly sensual and tells about that in a beautiful way, i love you say that "It's not fair that you stay here for me when you could do so much better" it means a lot to a person to have someone who loves and cares about them this much. I'm happy that you have so many deep emotions in this poem. congradulations on the beautiful gold trophy; it will look great on your page, as always keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy

  • reeseXtheXsoldier
    May 30, 2008
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    OMG!

    thanks so much for the GOld! and I had no idea you ammended the rules! I love this piece! You brought out a good 3 o'clock in the morning poem out of me!

  • Bel Ange silver member
    May 24, 2008

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    i wont DQ you fo bein 16 becaus yestrday i amend teh rules fo this contest to lower the age limit. I did thet becaus ther are quite a number of 16 year olds on this site who are more mature fo their years an as such write accordingly
    now, gettin on to you poem ...
    this is teh kind of poem i am talkin about. when i read this it was almost like reading my own thoughts.
    I relate to the preserving my dignity because my husband is teh same. honour and dignity ar very high on his list.
    but teh last 4 lines of you poem struck a very personal chord in me fo one reason. i ask myself thet same question almost daily an my anser is teh same as yours, it doesnt really matter what he does or doesnt see in me because it really is nice to have someone who just wan to kno how you are an how you day was.
    good luck in teh contest

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