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In Closing

 
Don't worry, I won't keep you
Captured in my letter, for too long
Time has come to deliver me, over to the other side
Let me make some things clear
Before I close my eyes

I did love sweetheart
With every breath, I gasp trying to taste your essence
I'd pick you for every dance, so why do you doubt me?
Love's first kiss, full of passion and bliss
I gave to you
Will you choose me?

Children, Daddy loves you
I'm sorry I missed your football games and dance recitals
I was trying my best to put food on the table
I would never neglect you and I will always love you

Tell my mother and father,
my next of kin, all of them
That I'm sorry for my absence
I should have been a better man

Notify the church for me
They are about to celebrate a life soon
 

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  • movedon
    July 26, 2008

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    The beginning yanked me in and held my attention until the ending, which made me shudder. Such pain....but so well written. Great work.

    Warmest,
    Mylee


  • TwilightAngel026
    May 24, 2008

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    A well written piece. It is short, and simple, a quick note even. Very good. I like the last line the best. Celebrating life is always better than mourning it.


  • Mistress Masquerade
    May 23, 2008

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    Wow, you almost made a tear come to my eye. A very powerful and emotional write. Best of luck in this contest.