she made her way to class
she was feeling unusally happy
it was if she was contained in a bubble, ignorant to everything else around her
she sat down where she always sat
'thats weird' she thought..
an envolope was placed on the centre of her desk
adressed to her.
she opened it.
her bubble of surreal joy was broken
leaving her falling fast and hard.
"if you're reading this letter then i'v finally done it.
i want you to know it wasnt your fault
you couldnt of stopped this
you probably didnt even see it coming
but dont worry, i dont blame you.
i know we've always been different.
we've always been a bit distant,
i regret that.
but you're still the closest thing to a best friend i'v ever had."
she was confused,
then it slowely and painfully dawned on her
she turned her head to look at the class.
as if someone had put her life in slow motion, the pieces fell into place.
people were crying
their eyes red and their cheeks puffy,
afraid of what she might see next,
she tried to stop reading,
but she couldnt tear her eyes from the tear stained letter.
"im sorry.
im sorry for so much,
about the fights,
the lies,
the hurt we both had to endure.
he's yours and you are both perfect for each other,
and i have to trust you will never show him this.
i had mistaken his friendship for more then what it was.
i fell so quickly that my face stayed in the dirt,
i was unable to lift myself from the grave i had dug myself
im sorry that my surreal dream had to come at the cost of your happiness
but trust me,
he assured me he didnt return my feelings.
i loved him,
but not as much as he loved you."
NO, this couldnt be true.
it was just a nightmare, she would wake up soon.
or maybe it was just a cruel prank
she quickly looked around the class.
her friend wasnt there,
but that must be a co-incident,
it HAD to be!
paranoia settled in.
as much as she didnt want to continue the letter,
her eyes didnt care what her mind wanted
she blocked out the mourning of the rest of the class and tried her best to focus
"im done
done with dying friendships
done with broken trust
done with fear of bad school marks
done with the bitter sting of unrequited love,
done with the daily disappointment of life,
just...just...
done.
so i guess this is my goodbye
tell him that you love him
because we both know its true.
and forget me
i'v already faded,
my only memory is in this letter,
so burn it,
and burn my pain away with it
goodbye"
it was then,
she found that she had been crying the whole time.
Author notes
i tried hard convey the story line though i dont think it actually got across very well,
so i'll say it here.
its about these two girls who (despite loving the same boy) try to be friends.
they both care for each other, they just care for this boys affection more.
and i tried to picture the guy as a sweet guy who has done nothing wrong, he just didnt feel the same toward this girl, which (ontop of other things) caused her to commit suicide.
she wasnt bitter. she just wasnt good at life.
i tried to make this story bittersweet as i could but im not sure if it worked or not...
ok and to be honest this isnt a pre-write...but it meets the critera exactly so...sorry for that.
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Comments
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It was different, good, and almost bittersweet. You were so close, but I liked that she was crying the entire time with out realizing.
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hmm... it was different and very good... but not what I was looking for. sorry
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umm ... ok. It was a good story. I am not so sure that it was a poem. It was very bitter-sweet, and sad, a good job. It was an interesting take on the prompt. You are the first to have turned it into a story along with the letter. It is a unique and very creative entry.
I am not sure exactly what you mean by "ok and to be honest this isnt a pre-write...but it meets the critera exactly so...sorry for that." though.
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wow
I understood the story line,it was clear and I love the stile you wrote it in!
great write!
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