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No Where Feels Like Home.

I want to run away forever,
no where feels like home.
Only if I were in the depths of your arms.
I miss you,
I love you,
Won't you please come back home.

I don't want to dissapoint you,
But I don't know how you feel.
Only if I knew, then I try to change.
I miss you,
I love you,
Won't you please come back home.

You don't know what you mean to me.
You left me at a young age,
I'm sorry it was against your will.
But if you just knew what I was going through,
Maybe you'd understand,
Maybe you do understand.

Some may call Him several praising names,
I call him a terrible Father.
I miss you,
I love you,
Come back home.




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Dedicated to my mother and father. Rest In Peace, I love you.

This is only my third poem. What do you think?

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  • Todd-ster
    May 25, 2008

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    i know how it is at times. i never met my father, he ran from my mom before i was born. at least from this your poetry will grow, and i'm sure that you will to grow as a person. keep strong. and keep faith.


  • Maxboy gold member
    May 24, 2008
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    liaanne

    This is very sad, mostly because, it looks as though it is real to you.

    MAXBOY


  • just mercedes gold member
    May 24, 2008
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    This is a sad poem, and I feel you have been very honest in your expression of emotion. Poetry is a good way of giving expression to what we feel, releasing some of the pain, and addressing those we miss and can't talk to in other ways. I identify stongly with the title of your poem. I think you will go on to write more, and enjoy the experience.


  • Blueisacolour
    May 23, 2008

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    First off, this was a very honest and personal poem, and that speaks volumes.

    For the topic you've chosen, I feel there's so much you could have done with this. But that's okay.

    I'm not too sure if the repeating of lines worked very well, it seemed to be filling up gaps rather than adding something to the poem.

    The message your poem delivers really makes one think. My best wishes to you and I hope you're happy. Writing and releasing the locked up emotions inside really DOES help a lot. =)

    Always here for you if you need a friend.
    =)

    • liaanne
      May 24, 2008
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      Thankyou

      Thankyou so much for your kind words, and constructive critism, it means alot to me that you put in some effort to comment my second poem. Ill be sure not to put in repeating lines Again, Thankyou.

      liaanne.

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