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My Libitina

There is a girl who walks this world all alone
Through the valley of darkness she is the bringer of light
And although her eternal suffering may always be unknown
She holds on to being my heart’s last delight

From her lips the divine courses through me
I feel the blessing as it holds together my soul
But I know how her beauty the evil may never see
Yet our love we know we they will never control

She stands on mountains with midnight wings
Entire empires crumble from the requiem she sings
You call her Thanatos while I call her lover
For she will fulfill my need forever like no other
My angel of death my Libitina

We dance under blood red moons hand in hand
With the screaming of the condemned under our feet
Heaven will allow us but they will never understand
That we could be beaten and broken but never admit defeat

She sees all my sins and writes them in blood
We watch them disappear to the depth of the abyss
The paper is the skin of those who hated our love
And then drowned in the torture of our bliss

She stands on mountains with midnight wings
Entire empires crumble from the requiem she sings
You call her Thanatos while I call her lover
For she will fulfill my need forever like no other
My angel of death my Libitina

Never close your endless eyes to my mortal lust
Only take this flesh and plant on it your venomous kiss
My heart beats weak under your wounds on my bust
But nothing in this hell or the next can break this

My Libitina

She stands on mountains with midnight wings
Entire empires crumble from the requiem she sings
You call her Thanatos while I call her lover
For she will fulfill my need forever like no other
My angel of death my Libitina

Author notes

Dedicated to Pete
We are two pieces from the same jigsaw, but from different sides of the board. And yet we fit perfectly.

this is not only a song which i quite like since it includes my love of darkness and bi sexuality.I am happy in my relationship with a man, but my love for women will grow as old as i am.


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  • Venus25
    September 9, 2008

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    Beautiful

    What a wonderful dark yet peaceful tale! This had me hooked from the very beginning and i shall definately read again!

    Good luck


  • Poetic Obscenity
    July 24, 2008
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    STILL

    Ever so beautiful


  • Deaths Desire
    July 15, 2008

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    good luck

    very well written i must admit, a very powerful moving poem, loved it , good luck in my contest and thanx lots for entering i realy hope you do good

    lucky thing you wrote it to... dang!!!!
    smiles


  • techno-tard
    July 5, 2008
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    Wow very well written and just incredible...it gave me chills


  • Mistress Masquerade
    July 1, 2008

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    This is so beautiful, everything is so spot on here, flow, rhyme, rhythem, just every part of this is so fragile and pristine. It wasn't bitter, or hateful, instead it was almost tragic. The kind of work that so rarely comes around.

    "She stands on mountains with midnight wings
    Entire empires crumble from the requiem she sings
    You call her Thanatos while I call her lover
    For she will fulfill my need forever like no other
    My angel of death my Libitina"

    I love how that part repeated. Thank you for your emtry and best of luck in my contest.

  • Poetic Obscenity
    June 23, 2008

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    Thank you!

    I don't see how this has only won honorable mention. I mean this is absolutley amazing. I'm sorry it's taken so long to comment. There are just so very many entries. Looks like yours is the last one for the night.
    I thank you dearly for your entry. It's definitly a soothing difference to some of the other, not so pleasurable entries.

    You're an amazing writer. This has flow,rhyme, the rhythem..The story, your word choice. It's all quite amazing.


  • Starretta
    June 23, 2008
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    very interesting! So fluid and emotional. Good luck!


  • Redrusty66
    June 10, 2008

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    Great piece, I love the vocbulary work. You brought across the imagery with artistry and created a unique atmosphere. I liked the mythos surrounding the piece a great deal. Thanks for the great read.

  • wendymolly
    June 5, 2008

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    This is so understandingly incredible to read!!!
    ...and reread!!! These are the real thoughts and emotions of you, that is all too clear!!! Your a finalist for every reason!!!
    Take care,
    ~pithyAplomb.


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    June 4, 2008

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    This is beautiful, and it speaks so strongly. Admittedly, a few grammar errors, though minor, distracted me from the rest of the poem, I still found it worthy of the finalists' list. Well done, and good luck.

    Laura x


  • Brazos silver member
    June 1, 2008
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    Lovely, dark lyrics. Thanks for entering, and good luck in the contest.

    Novy&Brazos


  • sailor ptolema
    May 31, 2008

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    i really liked this!
    well done, I love the chorus! and your use of greek mythology


  • ennovy silver member
    May 29, 2008

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    Like a dark song that she sung, you tale is intresating and eerie......Thank you for entering ....Novy & Brazos


  • going to a funeral
    May 28, 2008

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    I LOVED THIS

    This is so Beautiful! So heartfilling! Thankyou so much for adding this to my contest! You did a wonderful job!

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