I'm changing for you,
Trying to be as perfect as I can.
You should be changing to.
Even though thats not you're plan.
We should try to work things out,
And set the record straight,
But everythings in doubt.
And I'm taking all the weight..
Off your shoulders,
To make things easier.
But "us" should be no more,
For this is the end.
Oh and how very much I adore,
Your smile, laugh and touch.
But we need to end this "thing"
It's hurting way to much.
Now I have to go,
So wish me luck forever.
And for this you'll always know.
I loved you.
This is my first poem. What do you think? Be honest.
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Hi liaanne
Breaking up is always hard to do, but sometimes it is the best thing for us in the end
Love should not be so painful Very good poem Well done
Please keep writing, reading and commenting
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liaanne
Very good first poem.
MAXBOY
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aww this is cute and sad. i saw a few little error with using 'you're' instead or 'your' in the dfirst stanza...if you go over it once more you should be able to find them all
keep it up and welcome to AP -
I like it, simple, yet elegent.
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