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Amber Eyes.

I followed you through the town.
I followed you through the trees.
Under those stars
Four turned to three

You said to me
I love you so
Those amber eyes
Glistening a deep orange glow

A deeper love
Burning through
Why didn't you say
He loves you too


It may be confusing right now
But you just have to look
Into my mind
A tightly bound book

Don't say you're leaving
You've only been here a while
..It's been that long?
Please show me your smile

Those long white streets
Are waiting for you
Just return, you know
His heart is true.







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This is really about the story I am writing (the first part is up now.) Although more will be revealed later.

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  • DispondantTramp
    May 31, 2008

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    you can rhyme, yay you, so few people can rhyme without making it feel forced, I want to slap the people who force it with a slimy yet fish, I need it is the plan, oh and to murder them with crinkly sissors!


  • Lexie
    May 23, 2008

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    like this poem for it is very sweet and i liked the details. i alos liked the rhyming in this to. good poem!