He dressed in his white linen suit
Still crumpled from the night before
Running through the orchard
Fragrant with spring
Foretelling the apples
Ran through the dawn
With his bride.
A contest entry
- favourite things PIF by Nicolette.
1200 points, ended June 1, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
So, what's your opinion of this?
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I like how you've wrapped the prompt around this happy couple.
Marlene -
Excellent
Short, but so powerful. Very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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Its great
When their is love blindness befalls all about you
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Lovely simplicity here, although I suspect that this poem can be about lovers or can lean towards the spiritual too - and I like it when a poem takes me along different avenues.
"ran through the dawn with his bride" - what a lovely image that is! Nice work here - thank you for your entry.
~ Nicolette
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How nice to run with the one you love, such a nice picture you paint here.
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Well this paints a pretty romantic picture. I like it lots. HEY! No sarcasm. LOL I still belive in chivalry, altruism, and all that.
Good luck and write on, sis. One.
Dez
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Deceptively simple, this, I love the images of the night before, the blossoms shown rather than told, linking to the bride - and the eagerness of running.
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