My heart skips a beat as you reach for my hand,
I hear you talking but what you're saying i don't understand,
I'm lost in your eyes, a whirlpool of beauty,
I'm lost in your eyes, which hide all your pain,
I'm lost in your eyes, they set me free.
My stomach gets butterflies as you play with my hair,
Right now nothing matters, for only you i care,
I'm lost in your eyes, a whirlpool of beauty,
I'm lost in your eyes, which hide all your pain,
I'm lost in your eyes, they set me free.
The glistening stars shine, as it's time to see the moon,
suddenly it's Sunrise and the colours will arrive soon,
Yet, I'm lost in your eyes, a whirlpool of beauty,
Yet,I'm lost in your eyes, which hide all your pain,
Yet,I'm lost in your eyes, they somehow set me free.
As you wrap your arms around me to keep me warm,
I realise like a rose with it's thorn,
I'll forever be lost, inside your perfect eyes.
A contest entry
- AP Family by Theory Of The Lost.
450 points, ended August 16, 2008, 28 entries
Gold trophy winner
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jaded teardrop
this is definatly a really good poem, it makes perfect sense and it is soooooooooooo me...
As you wrap your arms around me to keep me warm,
I realise like a rose with it's thorn,
I'll forever be lost, inside your perfect eyes.
Perfect and it discribes me complelty ...
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Such a beautiful and sweet write!
Sounds like a song in the making.
Well done and thanks a lot for
sharing this one here!
Jeremy0826 -
I like the repetition; it makes the whole piece seem almost like a chant. Very nice!
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WOW great write/song, very descriptive, very meaningful. I love eyes and when someone writes something like this it just makes me like eyes even more. it had a great flow to it. Just wow amazing very well done goos luck in the contest. Ohh and what part of my family did u wanna be! thanks
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wow
realy good....ur work has alot of meaning and i enjoy reading them
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GREAT!
This is like a song. He must have real nice eyes. Its beautiful the way you describe being lost in them. I'll never look at a girl directly in the eyes the same again
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So true!
Wow! Don;t you just love a man's eyes? Men are supposed to be handsome, but their eyes are beautiful. I know, this one boy, and his eyes are blue whirlpools of intense, oceanic beauty, just like the one's you've described in this poem here. That time I was with him, alone, just talking, I can't even remember what he was saying because his eyes were just soooo gorgeous!! This poem reminds me of my own emotions so much.
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