dawn crests
over an orchard
blessed,
where behind
white linen veils,
are secret lovers
pressed-
against the bosoms
of these ladies
of the morning...
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Author notes
Prompt: white linen ~ orchards ~ dawn ~ In 45 Words or Less [24 Words]
A contest entry
- favourite things PIF by Nicolette.
1200 points, ended June 1, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like the blessed orchard, white linen veils and pressed bosoms and ladies of the morning instead of night!
Marlene -
What I liked about this poem is the many interpretations it allows the reader.... "secret lovers" - can be read as two people or as the trees being the sun's lovers. Lovely play on words here and something very mysterious about the poem too. I liked the softness of this piece too. Thank you so much for your entry.
~ Nicolette
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Wonderful
Such a great choice of 45 words. An so perfect for the prompt. best of luck in the contest.
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Stunning This is truly a stunning short poem Well done dear very well done and good luck
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Lovely write... smooth flow, great imagery... Well done.
Ken
PS Please - change the background
I'm blind!
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This is lovely, so soft and intriguing! Best of luck in the contest!
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