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May 16 and walking walking strong

go out, weave: wind
of no barren breeze reflection
but fruit trees stability
grabbing on none to pinch

neither kitchen blank,
bowled ripe prepares
aroma after rest
swirls sunrise
with nothing technical
as simple light textile.

don't exchange otherwise
towards birth, unmessy
que(ue) uniqueness

Author notes

good luck is not a vane; Isaiah 65:11

please comment without emoticons or applause symbol per,
though plant/animal types seem for purer thought

A contest entry

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Comments


  • marlene47 silver member
    May 31, 2008

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    Another great title and unique and personal write. Your images of fruit and the kitchen bears a strong tie with your present expectant condition.
    Marlene


  • Nicolette gold member
    May 24, 2008

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    Am I right when i read the first steps of a baby in this? That very special moment when a child starts walking and we look on thinking "fruit trees stability grabbing on none to pinch".

    You do have a very unique style of writing and your poetry carries so much depth in them. I appreciate that about your poems. There are some lovely imagery in this poem too and the reference to kitchen adds a sense of warmth and comfort to it. Thank you so much for editing to fit the contest requirements - and for this entry!

    ~ Nicolette


    • Bams
      May 25, 2008
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      I'm glad the concept could fit, though applause symbol are like stilletos to me lol

      N i c o l e t t e as I hear my daughter say, I get similar feeling

      thank you for your sensitive read. yes, there's compound bounciness with this and I'm happy you got one resonance right away. for no abrupt interest, the fruit trees have a reassureance from yard's reach for productivity and waiting for that hollow taste that builds sort of like honey stage of sweet, which reminds me of a youtube video I responded to when the tactile quality of taking which fruits off tree at a farm resembled a suckling's fingers checking and easily transitioning... so definitely or indefinitely in a way steps.

      I was quite heartened by your compliment, a mother gets to go tell her girl (about one whom she looks up to poetically a great deal lately, is finding a positive history with me ~ )

      I appreciated too the focus kitchen gave as an interjection on the course -- where impatience is unnecessary when a cojoiner as a congener, by allowing finishing ripening or fermenting in the inside garden, subtle as sunshine soak.

      I couldn't but start over for this work since I loved the stretch my lengthy one brought out but I so wanted to enter a trimmed one for you. this was originally how off and on I got :
      http://allpoetry.com/poem/4260733

      how fun to know your choice of three things; we were guessing flower of some sort and trees, which you had narrowed down on while I was looking for mountains also from a few strong references. but what you gave are pretty, not that some predictablity isn't either.

      striking for us to react to too,
      babies are my subject