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Heaven Sent

Why are you here?
Why should I,
Someone so undeserving,
Have you here to love me?
How is it that I am so very bad,
But you,
Who are faultless,
Remain here just the same?

You tell me that you love me
And that that will never change.
You say you could never break my heart
And that you want to mend the scars
Left by ones before you.

You are perfect, unblemished,
While I am stained.
My innocence has died
With the parts of my heart
That have been chipped away.

You look at me now
And tell me to hush.
If your words are true,
Hold me to you close
And never let me go.

Help me believe
You are heaven sent.

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    August 13, 2008

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    So intimate message you are herewith my friend..I love its personal touch..wonderful indeed.thanks for sharing..


  • Rovingone gold member
    May 23, 2008

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    I like the symbolism you use. Stained and parts of your heart chipped away, draw a very distinctive picture. I think your angel must be thinking they are just as fortunate and blessed.


  • Stardust-luvr
    May 23, 2008

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    well written for so often we are asking ourselves many questions of hope from feelings of disdain and guilt laying heavy upon our hearts. I must say the write made me think of this quote I had written last fall when I was deep in disdain feeling extreme lost thoughts : "Friends, shadows within the dark, bringing sunshine and renewed faith when hope seems lost in the rain, might just be angels sharing your tears!" I have found truth amongst certain friends of mine whom are like my own family whom I love and cherish wholeheartedly for they have been there for me thru thick n thin. and your friend will be there as well even in your darkest of days without realizing it you will feel ther comfort and strength. thank you for entering and many blessings always xxx


  • Chelse-Oh
    May 23, 2008

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    I absolutely love the first stanza. I feel like it's saying something deeper than just the questions you ask. Like, why are you here staying with me, I'm too horrible to keep you here. The feeling of guilt also came up when I was reading you're staying for me, and I'm holding you back from going onto greater things. but then the last few lines were a relief but there's still some anticipation of what's going to happen next in the ending... Ehh, this was a really long comment for such a little thing to say. But oh well. Good luck in the contest! <3


  • JustAnOrdinaryGirl
    May 23, 2008

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    This is an amazing poem. I connected so well to it...i found that the words were so true...they were what i looked to say but could not express. Thank you for sharing. Great job. Keep writing

  • Soar337
    May 23, 2008
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    This was beautiful, I can relate a lot.
    I would give you applause too, if I had more points. :/

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