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The Alien

I am an alien up in the sky
Watching your planet
And wondering why
That thousands are rich
While millions are poor
And your governments spend billions
On weapons of war

For christians one might have thought
That war was only a last resort
But with preemptive strikes
Invisible w.m.d.s and the likes

Then it seems rather odd
That a man who continually quotes God
Should have such delusions
And verbal confusions
The hypocritical sod

Any god worth his salt
Would bow his head in shame
At some of the diabolical deeds
That are carried out in his name

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  • peridotPixi
    July 8, 2008

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    Thank you for the beautiful entry to my contest,
    I like the way you say that you are the alien watching from the sky above and that you see the thousands are rich while millions are poor and I love how you state so much in this stanza
    Then it seems rather odd
    That a man who continualy quotes God
    Should have such delusions
    And verbal confusions
    The hypocrital sod

    Hypocrital = hypocritical
    Continualy =continually

    As always keep up the wonderful writing, ~ Amy

    • judmc
      July 8, 2008
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      AmyPixStix

      Many Thanks Amy for your kind comments on "The Alien"
      they are very much appreciated. I have sorted out the two
      typo's.It's a strange thing,I do water colour painting and
      we were taught "see what you see" not what you expect to see. Anyway that's my excuse.Glad you liked the poem
      Best Wishes and kindest regards George ++++


  • Darkwell
    June 28, 2008
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    Oooh WOW i like the direction you took in this one. i love this stanza

    Any god worth his salt
    Would bow his head in shame
    At some of the diabolical deeds
    That are carried out in his name

    If I was God I would probably rethink that whole free will thing too o.o

    WTG!! Good luck in the contest


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    June 13, 2008

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    Shaking His head in disbelief,
    God exclaimed, "What have I wrought,
    being betrayed by those who wear Me
    like a badge on their sleeve?"

    A great piece!

    Aesthete


  • Cyanide Milkshake
    June 8, 2008
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    True enough!


  • james119
    June 6, 2008
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    well said
    and painfully true of many religions:


    "Then it seams rather odd
    That a man who continualy quotes God
    Should have such delusions
    And verbal confusions
    The hypocrital sod"

    above is my favorite part.

    I am sure God must be disgusted with much that we do.
    Happily, there will be an end of it, and things will be set right.

  • amysticwriter silver member
    May 27, 2008

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    Thought provoking...At some of the diabolical deeds
    That are carried out in his name...well written...


  • HaleyMary
    May 23, 2008

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    Interesting write. I liked the first stanza. Reminds me of a video I watched the other day about aliens coming to Earth telling people to take care of their planet by telling them what global warming was doing to the environment. It's sad really that even though there is faith in the world, looking around at all the wars and destruction, sometimes I wonder what the leaders who choose to fight the wars actually believe what they are doing and why. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.

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