How well I remember the first
red rose you gave, with tender
kisses and the softest sighs
whispering "I love you" while
you danced with me, amongst the
stars that glowed within my eyes
through life's many twists and turns
the passing years have taken their toll
our eyes no longer shine so brightly
occasionally there's a flicker of what once
was; but the light dies, just as quickly as
it flares and we retreat into our shadows
strangers passing and nodding politely
acting more like brother and sister than
the way it should be with husband and wife
yet I love you still because my heart
remembers the way it used to be, back when
you danced with me amongst the stars
Author notes
This poem is dedicated to the man I will always love despite his indifference...
Prompt: Picture
Credit:
Rose by Morrissey666, collected from deviantart
A contest entry
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I love how you worded this Mum -
while
you danced with me, amongst the
stars that glowed within my eyes
I love the whole piece speaking of the love..the pain in thre flicker that once was; but the light dies just as quickly as it flares
A really really touching write mum, thank you so much
Good luck
Cin
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A most heartfelt penning Margaret, I really felt this one. Best of luck in the contest.
Love and peace always,
mj.
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~smiles~
We do dance under stars Sis...
We are poets...our path is pain.....our words are few but sad...our hearts are broken...our eyes tear and we understand... -
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To love from open doors and passage ways. To only see a flicker of what was. Hardly speaking, is sad that the marriage had to come to this. So many try to stay together because it becomes comfortable, or for the kids they stay. All the wrong reasons to contiue doing so, when two have the right to search themselves once again and be happy with life once again.
~Sie
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SO SWEET!!!!
Oh my! I believe we all have that one special love that will always stay in our hearts. This is a very beautiful and heartfelt write!
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it a credit to teh both of you thet you stil remain so amicabl in spite of teh indifrence, so many othrs wold hav givn up by now an go ther own seprat ways.
you poem is a wondrful testement to teh love you stil have fo him an it take mor gumton to stay in a situaton liek thet then it take to go.
jan ♥
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Wow...what an awesome write sis. Your words are really touching and show a certain longing for what once was.
Best of luck in this contest. Looks like Gold to me
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Aww hun.. this is so touching!! I'm sorry for the indifference... that is a difficult thing to fight against, even with love.!
This really is a wonderful poem that shows us what love you once had, were blessed with, but ending sadly with a subtle longing for what once was!
Beautiful write
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