Our love is a garden
consumed with just weeds
Left untendened
caring not for each others needs
Passion and dreams was how
our love got it's start
It has now vanished
in what's left of my broken heart
I gave you my love
and was always there
But you did what you wanted
without a care
You told me you're sorry
to believe what you say
But you repeat the same thing
the very next day
One day when you're down
and feeling alone
You'll look back and remember
you once had a home
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darlintlc
A contest entry
- This Is What Broken Looks Like by Georgia La Mariposa.
300 points, ended May 24, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
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This is a really great poem, the ryming and the words and every thing just falls rite to gether, Thanks for entering my contest,
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Thanks for commenting on "Love Untended" I'm glad you enjoyed it! Good luck with your contest!!
darlintlc
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This is stunning. This is one of the few poems that the rhyming is not forced or cliche. It really works. Loved it
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Thanks for commenting on "Love Untended" I always thought of love as a garden and if left untended it will die...but if given care it will thrive!!
darlintlc
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loves story
aptly told.. lived it loved it
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Ha! Havn't we all lived this!
Glad you liked it and thanks so much for commenting!
darlintlc
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Heartrending piece this is. And how true too. The garden isn't always rosier on the other side of the fence. Wonderful sad writing here. Your emotion comes through here. Well done on the gold. Well-deserved.
With
Dark
Love
Wayne Leon
xx
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Thanks for commenting on "Love Untended" sorry I was so slow getting back to you..sometimes I'm just a slow lady! ha! I loved this pic and this is what his story was telling me..a sad story indeed.
Thanks so much
your friend
darlintlc
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GREAT
a poem that so many people can relate to. Very well done. I liked the lines
"Our love is a garden
consumed with just weeds
Left untendened
caring not for each others needs"
Very very well done
thank you for entering my contest
and thank you for sharing this poem with me.
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Thanks for your comment on "Love Untended" and I'm glad you enjoyed it!
good luck with your contest!
darlintlc
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A poem many can relate to. It speaks volumes simply and honestly. I like that as I think it gives the better a greater impact that way. Well done and good luck in the contest!
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kick his butt you go girl.. tell him like it is... dont let him mess with you...! love this... see i like rhyme but for some reason alot dont... why i dont know... i think it takes talent to make it rhyme... but thats just my opinion... im starting to like other things too but my fav is rhyme... good luck in contest...
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Wrote this one last night..I hate liers more than anything!!
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wow this iwas fantastic, I really liked the ending very good, I got such a sense of nostalgia as i've been there loads great work
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Thanks for your comment on "Love Untended" I guess alot of us have been there! I'm there now and it make's you feel like you wasted your life!
darlintlc
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