dear my love
i have waited all so long
for you to love meis that so wrong
i have longed for you breath on my hair
and for you wonderful gazing stare
i have longed for the taste of you lips
and for your the feeling of your hands around my hips
the love you give is so immensely great
that it could defey anything at an amazing rate
but the thing i have longed for was someone to love
mabey it was a god send sent from above
your love truley and always will
conquer all and my heart it fills
for you will now and always be
the only one... the one for me
this one i wrote for my love but i never accually gave it to him..... to scared to do it
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GREAT JOB!
I think you did an awesome job here.
Keep up with your writting.
And As you mentioned to me before about my stuff was better, not necessarely i have a poem that someone didn't like so well. But you alwats find that certain person who critises your work to the worst..No matter how good or bad it is you keep working on it and you'll succeed in all you do..
Good luck my friend.
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Fantastic
this is really good....keep it up!!!
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*thumbs up*
this is really good -
Its really cute... The rhyme scheme is subtle, which makes the concentration more on the words, great poem, especially for your age.
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