I freed myself of his possession
weaving unsteady brick laden paths,
crashing into moss covered rocks.
He watches from the tower,
such volume to evil laughing
echoing into darkness.
Almost falling,
the most precious white dove appears
a fluttering of wings and safely I
follow, embarking on my freedom.
Author notes
49 words
Picture Credit --http://wingsofic.deviantart.com/art/untitled-86451299
In a list
A contest entry
- Pic Prompt (PIF) Semi-Quickie ... bring me magic!! by kiwigirljacks.
700 points, ended May 23, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Forgot to clap...oh and my daughter liked this write, she was all somber when I was reading it outloud to her then she giggled at the end
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aw thats so cute I love the thought your reading it aloud and someone else is listening etc...I do that with many poems with my fince im liek listen to this lol
My organ is awesome thats great your G'ma had one..mine does , allthough I havent seen her in many years for a few reasons, i was taught on my other grannys organ, it was a miracle find when I stumble upon that organ and for only 100dollars...priceless to me, but one day as an antique now I will make a bundle off it lol
but not for a quite a while yet, enjoy it too much
It's funny some pictures I get a true my own take on it, some I get a more to whats in the picture but my own words..i think this is one of those, which ws why i was suprised at winning gold lol...but sometimes even something on the simple side can speak to the judge etc
Thanks for your great comment
Stay well
Cin
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Once again you did great capturing the picture, I like how you do that, studying the picture for a while then doing the write. That is really smart, oh I forgot to mention...that organ you have...my g-ma when I was a little boy had one and I loved playing on it. Yours is a replica to my g-mas and it made a lot of good memories come forth when I saw the picture of it on your page. Wonderful write as always...your starting to become one of my favorite poets already! Peace n' Love, JT
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Nicely done! I love your wording, the images and the story you got on this pic!
Congrats on the Gold!
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Fab!! I really like how you saw her as escaping someone and following her freedom! Wonderful write, thanks
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my pleasure, great pic
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Ooo, wonderfully dark hon! This should do well!
Love and peace always,
mj.
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Thanks Dad
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Beautifully penned hunni, love the way you saw this (hehe I saw only dark) A fab read, good luck in the contest
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Hehe i only saw jus dark at first but then thought shes running whats she runnign from lol
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Very nice Cinds!!!
you said the you had no inspiration...I think that it found you...love this!
Simon
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yeah typical right when I should be thinkign about bed and a ogod night sleep, my muse comes to lif ehehehe.am nearly finished writing another too lol
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~taps foot at sis~...off to bed hooligan!
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..i want it ot be perfect lol, jus tweaking one thing lol
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Brilliant sweetheart, absolutely amazingly wonderful
I love the way you wove a story around the picture in so few words and it was done with such a graceful flow.
Best of luck in the contest honey.
Love you
Mum 
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I tried to get such a sotyr within 50words, not easy but I think I managed it too heheh Thanks Mum
U toooo
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